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Well, One of my first ones.....
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Well, One of my first ones..... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Allen's challenge: I got to thinking, and I've written short stories and poems since probably I was in 3rd grade... however I can't remember all of them... Here, I dug one up from when I was 15 or 16.... I'm waltzing in a tattered dress, I'm sore from limb to limb, I'm waltzing in a tattered dress, Soon, something's gotta give. The evening air is chilling, The moon so large and round, It's smile is so brightly seen, Mine is lost and longing to be found. I'm waltzing in a tattered dress, But no one seems to care. My partner might just love me, I may just have a chance, But what a risk to take, And I could never dare. So I keep this hope alive, ignited in my soul, One day I may just take that risk, and face a world I've never known. My first published poem, actually. What do you think? |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, nicely done! I enjoy this, but I was really going for something from a younger age... Still, thanks for sharing this piece! Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
that darn Lakewalker! Screwed our order all up! well, i'm cleaning up after him! *bump |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nice one here jenn!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like this poem, you did a very good job on it. And Allan, what would the "order" be if someone didn't come in a change it every once in a while??? Pretty orderly, I'd say, and that's no fun  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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