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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

0 posted 2001-03-19 05:11 PM

An unexpected Facade.

On the inside he is fragile,
On the outside he is strong,
He looks so very agile,
Walks like nothing could go wrong,
But he always insecure,
And he’s feeling paranoid,
He wants a love thats pure,
But it’s pain he must avoid,
They say that he’s a hero,
He thinks that is unfair,
Nothing but a zero,
Drowning in dispair,
Nothings really wrong with him,
It’s only his self doubt,
He see’s the futures grim,
So he just goes and lets it out.

Love is a friendship caught on fire.

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

1 posted 2001-03-19 08:09 PM

Hey,

WOW, no replies. Well this is a really good I though. Oh well I am happy to be the first to repile. Keep it up this is great

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-03-19 09:45 PM

I think this poem could be related to the killings in the highschools that have happening lately. This provoked some serious thoughts in my head. I thought you wrote this nicely.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-03-20 10:00 AM

Great poem! I love your work, and I can't wait to read what's next... I agree with Dopes, this does make me think of the shootings that's been going on lately. Nice poem.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Allan Riverwood

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since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

4 posted 2001-03-20 10:04 PM

I was thinking what Javier was... seems like it could be related to the shootings.
Great job.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-03-26 07:33 PM

hmmmmm
interesting
let's just hope that isnt it

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

6 posted 2002-03-22 05:36 PM

I like this one a lot, because it reminds me so much of someone I care about. He had me fooled for the longest time, but I'm beginning to realize that he isn't who he seems to be. Great work, Marshalzu.

sky

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