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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Echo’s. I’m sick of drinking coffee, Because it reminds me of you, My heart has turned to toffee, Except it’s black and blue. I’m listening to the radio, And then they play our song, I go back a long time ago, When nothing had gone wrong. I’m going through my diary, And I read the things I wrote, The way you made me fiery, The way I almost cut my throat. I’m looking at a letter, That you wrote to me, In a time when things were better, And you were in love with me. I see you in the street one day, and I feel my heart beat fast, All the things I want to say, Are just echoes from the past. Zu. Love is a friendship caught on fire. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Pretty good poem here. Not as good as some of your others. Nonetheless I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is another good poem from you. Keep writing and posting  --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Yeah, this was good. Don't be discouraged by Javier, he says that for all but one of your poems. It's just how he is.  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
What a wonderful piece. the simple rhyme scheme gave a wonderful picture and made it easy for my lazy self to comprehend. (something I was deeply in need of) Best wishes...~*~Jesilyn~*~ "Tell me why you cry" |
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