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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Such a fragile little flower Growing more beautiful by the hour Even in a land of sin its presence shall not cower Bearing pain like the thorns of a rose It plays on the emotions to demonstrate its power But back to a soiled hell is goes Crushed and trampled by it’s foes Pushed deeper and deeper by each of the blows This Punic victory leaving there mouths sour The wound left upon the innocent finally shows alright I don't really know what to call this cuz I don't really know if it's symbolic or not. Like I've said alot of my poems truly are writing themselves..I'm just holding the pen. >¶Øʆ< |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The rhyme scheme was very interesting. VERY interesting. And the poem itself... well it could be many things. It all depends on how literally it was to be taken. Care to help us out a bit? ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
"Even in a land of sin its presence shall not cower" This is beautiful. I love the analogy used. Very nice work  --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Well, I love this, you're a fantastic poet, I love all your work! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was very very well done. I liked the scheme and the whole theme of it all. very well done!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
Well the majority of my stuff is symbolic unless it has to do with blood then it's either/or. I seriously don't know what it's about the words just sometimes comes to me. And as for the rhyming scheme...I get bored easily...that is the result. Anyways thanx for the replies >¶Øʆ< |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you are very talented POA I'd like to see you write free verse on of these days I know you'll be much better at that thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
I think it is one of your best, and personally it is going into my library. As for a title, I don't know. Maybe "Petals of a Stronger Time". I have no clue. In my opinion, it is useless to ask others to name your stuff because frankly, only you know what any of it means. "The heart can think of no devotion |
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