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starryeyed999
Junior Member

since 2001-03-05

Posts 35

0 posted 2001-03-18 11:59 PM

Our friends pressured us
You looked in my eyes
and i knew then how hard it would be.
We barely knew eachother
but we felt the same things.
We both wanted to get to know eachother,
but thats hard to do when we never see one another
Maybe it was just a chemical reaction
Or it was just a physical attraction.
Everytime I see you,
I like you even more.
I'm just glad we didn't go too far.

<*Lacy*>
"I can only please one person a day. Today is not your day. Tomorrow doesn't look good either. I'll get back to you."

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

1 posted 2001-03-19 10:23 AM

I liked this one. It seemed short, sweet, and to the point.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2001-03-19 12:20 PM

A nice little direct piece.

Keep posting.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-19 12:37 PM

I liked it.....pretty to the point in this one. You wrote it well.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Linc

Senior Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-03-19 12:40 PM

I agree short, sweet, and to the point

keep up the good work.

-- Linc

"Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment."

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-20 01:25 PM

Short, but very nicely done. Keep writing and posting.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

6 posted 2001-03-20 10:19 PM

Ooh... nice job.

I'll agree that it was very to-the-point. And that tends to help poetry have a more profound impact.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

7 posted 2001-03-23 05:52 PM

I liked this one 2 and im also glad you didnt do n e thing that you might have regret in the end. It was like everyone else said, short, sweet, and to the point which is nice. Good job and cute poem!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2001-03-30 04:33 PM

I agree with the rest, short and to the point. thanks for the read

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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