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My Apology To The World
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My Apology To The World |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Happy St. Patty's day =) May the luck of the Irish be with ye *giggles* No seriously I'm hoping to find a leprechaun myself!!! 17 March 01 I'm sorry for all that I lack And for all that I get back I'm sorry for the unselfish things that I do And I'm even sorry for all the times I come crying to you I'm even sorry for the way I disregard myself And how I always put my hopes and heart upon a cluttered shelf I'm sorry that I really don't know who I really am And that sometimes I'm to weak from tears to even stand But what I apologize for most in this life Is that I've lost all track of hope and time I've been so blinded by treachery That I can barely even see what is standing right infront of me "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Ceinwyn, if you can identify all of the thing that you think you have to apologize for, than you are cured. I think it is the ones who think everything is all right that have a problem. This is a healing verse and very well done. Hugs, ME |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Hey girl I'm thinking you shouldn't have to apologize to anyone for yourself. You are a person, and just because you may not know who you are, that doesn't mean you should apologize. Please don't be sorry for anything! Best wishes...beautiful piece by the way...~*~Jesilyn~*~ "Tell me why you cry" |
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Barelybreathing Junior Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 46 |
I like this...You have a nice rhythm and i can truly relate to it..~sami~ 'The greatest thing in the world is to know how to be one's own.' |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Is it just me, or is this half sarcastic? I don't know, but it's movieng, and I love it, and it's going into my library. "Some men see things as they are and say why. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought it was written nicely. I liked it and I haven't seen you around lately! You oughta come by more often!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
She doesn't have her own compy, Javier. Otherwise yeah, I wish she would be here more often too! This was a great job! An apology to the world... wow... very powerful concept. Hope to see you tonight, so we can work on ours!  ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I don't remember reading your work before, but I love this. If this is sarcastic then... right on... but if not, then, please don't apologize for being yourself, I've been down that road far too often. Keep writing!! Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Thanks guys well some of what I said was half sarcasim and the other half just I'm sorry for being naive at times I guess *shrugs* like I said I'm sorry for the unselfish things I do and never get anything back in return kinda deal ya know? but anyways thanks again  |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
This fits so well it is scary! Great poem!
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
I know. There is someone I know that should really read this so she can realize. Good job. Especially the end "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I liked the end a lot too. Very nicely written... Good job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Very nice poem.Loved the sarcasm. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
You know, it's a good thing you live in Maryland. I'd beat you with my Guiness Glass for trying to find a Leprechaun. They're shy creatures PLUS they only live near the pots of gold at the end of the rainbow. geez...don't you know anything? lol  You are you so don't you dare apologise! If people can't hack it, they can adjust. Just look at Dopes' signature. That'll tell you everything you need to know. ~AF~ "It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory." |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
All i can say is great poem. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why are you apologizing to this person for who you are? You wrote this piece really well, and thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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