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Machines and Inescapable Cycles |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This is my first freeverse in a long time. Hope you like it. BTW, any names in the poem are purely coincidential, and do not represent any actual people I may know. Morning Catlyn, did you know your father phoned last night? "What does he want now?" Life beckons. A world reckons It sure would be nice to have this.... Forget your wife and kids, she feels better... As if from some serpantile demon from hell, Awake from slumber and embrace foolishness, grace, civilization... Midday It's falling through! Call in lawyers, call in investors! We are going down! But the childr-- Who cares?!?!?!?! Dancing in some giant Darwinian ego complex Gyrating to the new rhythm of economics Lights of drugs and ecstacy carress the soft smooth floor and await your tender kiss. Forget about it all. Live in the moment of confusion. We are winning! We are gaining ground! We'll lose it again, but who cares? Such is the circle of life. Evening Comfort. pleasure. "Catlyn, you're father!" Father beckons, life closes, day ends, death dawns "What do you want???" Silence, no response on the other end. Sounds so alien. "Just to say goodnight and goodbye." Goodbye? For what? We'll see each other again... "I've decided to get aboard a corporation..." "But... Daddy..." "I too am now dead." Long pause, silence, click, closing deals, closing up into night, succumbing to darkness Goodnight, fair sweetheart, goodnight.... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Now, now... let's reply to this, everyone. Don't be shy.  It was very good, Frac. Thought you did marvelously. Jeremydraul is going to have your head for calling it free-verse, and using one measly rhyme in it.  This was pretty good, I could detect that it was your first somehow. The last two lines ruled. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this a LOT fractal. great concept, great poem, and great style. Yet another one of your master pieces!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I love the style of your poems. This one caught my eye, and I like it. Very good job. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ohhhh yeah. Very great, Frac. Very great indeed. ~Carly "The eye sees a thing more clearly in dreams than the imagination awake." - Leonardo da Vinci |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You have such an imagination. Have you ever considered prose? "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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