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CLBinLOVE
Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA

0 posted 2001-03-14 09:20 PM

trees all around
moon high in the sky
sky of black velvet
with silver specks of beauity

the crackle of pinestraw underfoot
where am i?
i hear an owl
where am i?

i see no lights
save the moon and stars
i know no direction
i know no landmarks

im in a strange land
in the woods at night
not my woods at night
where am i?

i should stop
wait for day
not move any more
not get farther away

but i walk on
is that a light?
the sound of pinestraw underfoot
i walk on

i should be home by now
am i going the right way?
where am i?
i walk on

the moon
high in the sky
my guiding light and hope
i am lost

i look to the moon
say a silent prayer
no response
i walk on

the destination is all that matters
i have to get back
have to get home
i walk on

i smell the pine
the air cool and crisp
i hear an owl
i walk on

i look at the sky
i breathe the air
i lean against a tree
i enjoy the night

i enjoy the night

[This message has been edited by CLBinLOVE (edited 03-14-2001).]

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

1 posted 2001-03-14 10:16 PM

This is great

Does kinda sound like you......

Te amo
Bel

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

2 posted 2001-03-15 02:53 PM

Wow, what wonderful imagery!! This is fantastic! :-) Keep posting, I love this stuff!

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-15 09:14 PM

I thought this was pretty great!
nicely done here on this one. The way it was written appealed to me greatly.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-03-18 11:39 PM

wonderful imagery my friend. You narrate in your poem really good. thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-03-19 09:55 AM

I love the imagery! This is a beautiful poem. Great job!

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

6 posted 2001-03-19 12:06 PM

I've got a picture in my head of someone saying a prayer to the moon now. Very cool.

Hope to see more like this.

~AF~

"It is not necessary to change. Survival is not mandatory."
-W. Edwards Deming

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