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grey::tears Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19lost within my mind |
i am alone i sit here people laugh and run outside the door is locked they cant come in but i still feel so voulnerable and parianoid they come close and i tense once they walk away, i am fine but still not quite as relaxed the sound of their happiness stirs my rage and yet i envy them so is this the same way it is in my mind? i dont know i wish i was once of them ignorant to the reality of life pleased with my own density and yet smouthered by my own cloud let me go and play with them a disguise will let me into their elite club and they will accept me as one of their own just like in the movies except i wont reveal myself in the end it is quite comfortable in there who knows that a lifetime could pass by like that was it a waste? to be so fake, in order to feel real to shallow myself, in order to be considered deep to hide myslef, so i could be alive but was it really life or my own version of death in disguse? A.K.S. "Never fear something, just because you don't understand." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
I don't know why this has so few replies! This is a brillinat work of art, PERFECT for this place!!! Keep posting, and the rest of you, reply to this! It's going in MY library "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this poem. I thought you did well!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I liked the question you proposed at the end. Let me get back to you on that one...  Great job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. I really like this poem! You did a great job. I agree with Allan on the question at the end. Very nicely done. --Marie [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow.. I really like this poem! You did a great job. I agree with Allan on the question at the end. Very nicely done. --Marie [This message has been edited by Fading Away (edited 03-14-2001).] |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Some interesting philosophical questions here. My critique is for you to watch your spelling a little. Anyhow, I think this was, on the whole, quite a good poem. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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grey::tears Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19lost within my mind |
hey, thanks for the notes. I know, i am working on my spelling, and my whole life it has been my worst subject, and i guess it still is. A.K.S. "Never fear something, just because you don't understand." |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I ask myself that question everyday... anyway.. The poem was Magnificent!!! My attention was held by every word spoken/read. You did a wonderful job on this.. keep it up Things will get better just be happy with what has come your way today, and keep living for what may come the next.~ By Amanda inspired by Brian |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey Gray::Tears, This is great work, hope to see more of your work. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why do you feel you have to be with them for you to be happy? Don't let them accept you for who you really are not My friend, you are doing this the wrong way you should be with people who want to be with the real you that's where you'll find happiness "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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