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Ricky
Junior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 28
West Virginia, USA

0 posted 2001-03-13 08:49 PM

I have said some things that I didn't mean
I told you of an emotion that few ever seen
This screwed it all up and now people hate me
But your side is the only one they see

You act like your the good one all the time
Well now I'm so sick and fed up with your slime
So go away and leave me alone
And quit calling me on the telephone

We broke up just a few days ago
It's over now and you have to let go
So don't get mad and irrate
When I tell you to stop the hate

You have no reason to spread stuff around
No one likes you and they just make you look like a clown
So go ahead and have fun now
In the end you're the one who will feel down

THIS ISN'T ABOUT ANYONE ON THIS POETRY BOARD THINGY.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2001-03-14 11:21 AM

the afterthought made me go "oh okay." hehe

Overall a good poem, Ricky. Someone else reply to this!

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

2 posted 2001-03-14 01:18 PM

I thought this poem was excellent...really like it, made me kinda think of revenge, I'm not sure why, but that's the wonder of poetry, has a different meaning for every different person that reads it.

Loved it!

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-03-14 02:23 PM

NIcely done here.........and good job on posting the after thought.......I was thinkin "this is about tamma......tamma....this is about tamma"
and then i was like "this isn't about tamma.....tamma......this isn't about tamma"

now i'm thinkin "i'm lame.......really lame.....God I'm lame"

so yea.....i'll be going now.
Once again, good job

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2001-03-14 04:04 PM

Nice poem. And yes... good work on the lil added thingie... it probably saved everyone a lot of unneccesary junk!!

Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2001-03-17 07:02 PM

One of your best work I think
You've expressed yourself really well
such emotions......hope things get better
thanks for the read
keep sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-03-17 07:06 PM

I agree that this is one of your best. VERY nice job here.

--Marie

I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am.

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

7 posted 2001-03-17 10:28 PM

hhmmm...interesting read. I thought your words came together nicely. I only hope you don't let these feelings of resentment consume you. Not that you will...just hope you won't. I have done that and learned...DON'T LoL anyways, nice work, thanks for sharing. ~*~Jesilyn~*~

"Tell me why you cry"

fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

8 posted 2001-03-17 11:21 PM

Revenge is always so sweet. As for the afterthought, I just got here so I have no clue.

"The woods are lovely, dark, and deep
But I have promises to keep
And miles to go before I sleep
And miles to go before I sleep"
-Robert Frost

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

9 posted 2001-03-18 04:41 PM

Am I that bad...Honestly?

i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened

[This message has been edited by Tamma (edited 03-18-2001).]

~sugarpie313~
Member

since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

10 posted 2001-03-18 04:51 PM

i really like this one!!! i have a feeling that this is what most guys think when they say it's over. but anyways... good job!! it's goin in the lib.

Valerie

*Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes*

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