Teen Poetry #4 |
The Cat and Her Stolen Tongue |
Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
It's become so cold on my side of town and when I need a lift there's no one around What I want and need are pointless to voice they fall from my lips like leaves in the bitter chill of fall and they lay dead and empty when they find the ground |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Pretty good... not exactly your best. I think it would have been better with some sort of a format to it. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Awww..., that's so sad... omg, i'm speechless, please be happy...wow! It's wonderful, I'm glad to reply to it, and add it to my library! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Ewww....I hate formats. I'm all freestyle. It may be the downfall of my work, but it's what I like. Thanks though..both of you. and in the end we still pretend the time we spend not knowing when we're finally free and you could be -NIN "The Wretched" Angel of Darkness |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NO!!!!!!!! NO!!!!!!!!!! This was great! I really liked this but what does the title have to do with it? I thought this was great! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I too thought this was good kinda felt like you cut it short though i'd like to see your free verse longer thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Yeah, this is kind of short. But I liked it just the same, just try to expand on it a little more. GOod job, though. --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
yay! Another champion for freeverse. I totally dig the poem. "The woods are lovely, dark, and deep |
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