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Hurtful Remembrance
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Hurtful Remembrance |
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HappyPretender Junior Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 38Prince George, VA |
My tears are shed And you still smile All the while I wonder Why it ended Was love supposed To hurt so much And I remember All your words Of not hurting me Not making me cry For they were just lies And now Look what you did Now it's too late You're really gone I cry so much For I'm left behind. <3~*Rachael*~<3 *we can't become what we need to be by remaining what we are* |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well done! I think this poem has a good format. The last two lines hit hard and are quite well thought-out. Good job. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Awww, that's so sad! Makes me feel kinda guilty though...eek! I hav eto go apologize to her again, thanks for the read "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here. I thought this was quite sad. Being left behind is so horrible. I know how it feels.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
It is hard to get over someone Everyone should know that hope thing do get better for you thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
That's sad... and I agree with acire, it is hard to get over someone. Very nicely written, though. I hope things only get better  --Marie I never thought that you would ever be the one to let me down. I guess that just goes to show how wrong I always am. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Yes it is well writen and well done its a great poem and it is sad but still great. Keep up the good job and until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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