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Second Chance |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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Today, I passed you in the hall I could feel you look my way My friend said you did I couldn’t help but force back a tear Later on, I passed you again Only this tyme I was alone You looked at me, and I, at you But our eyes didn’t meet As I continued down the hall I could feel your eyes following me But I refused to look back When I told my mom She said you might be hurting to She said I should talk to you I don’t know what to do… I let on that it doesn’t still hurt But it’s killing me, so I still force a smile I watched you say my name While talking to a friend I didn’t know what you said But you were looking my way I was talking to my lil brother And too busy to worry with you Do you feel the same as I Do you think our love deserves a second chance? This (obviously) is about Justin, I just wish I knew what he was thinking, or what he was telling his friends  i dont know if i should cry because its over, or smile because it happened |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
I think that you expressed your confusion in this poem wonderfully. you said what you wanted to know, and didn't ramble like i tend to do LOL and am right now.  you should give this to him (including the note at the bottom) or slip him a note in his locker... asking him how he feels. or call him! *L* great job, and i love your signature... ~Valerie~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Good job on this poem. Does he really deserve a second chance? think about it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey Tamma, like I said before, I can't help, sorry about htat. But the poem is a wonderful piece of emotion in words. Most of your work is very good in that way. I hope ou find happiness. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
You've talked to me about Justin before. He doesn't deserve a second chance. You know who I think is your best choice at the moment.  Of course, I have already told you that.~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-12-2001).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hi Tamma seems like your life is full of questions I don't know the sitaution that much so I won't say anything I do like the poem though thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
Tamma, sorry I am so late on this...The poem is outstanding in everyway. You really showed alot of deep emotion in it and I thought you did a great job. As for the situation I really cant help you there.. for I dont know the situation well enough. Best of luck in your future Things will get better just be happy with what has come your way today, and keep living for what may come the next.~ By Amanda inspired by Brian |
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