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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2001-01-25 04:46 AM


I can no longer live pretense
the writing glares at me from wall
silent in its reckoning
a scream of heart--eight foot tall.
I see the truth in this cold stone,
and crave the hand that held the brush...
tracing words I do not own
as close I'll ever be to touch...

I stand here in my reverie
slumbering, recalling dream...
(as if I do not dream enough)
and wroth am I to wake abrupt
but even blinded by my tears
the silent words assaults my ears--
words I know I'll not forget
words of eternal love's regret.

He once stood where I now stand
and painted brick to ease his pain
crushed by stone of understand
I replied him just as plain
by blood of heart in my own hand--
"Never will I love again."


© Copyright 2001 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2001-01-25 04:55 AM


Spraying across another endless night of fantasy slumber as we once again meet in the wee hours of the day.  

Superb penning as always.  I have seen the writing on the wall many times but I don't think any of them did it so artistically.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-01-25 08:13 AM


I see the truth in this cold stone,
and crave the hand that held the brush...
tracing words I do not own
as close I'll ever be to touch...
=====================
words I know I'll not forget
words of eternal love's regret.

He once stood where I now stand
and painted brick to ease his pain
crushed by stone of understand
I replied him just as plain
by blood of heart in my own hand--
"Never will I love again."
======================

*silenced by my awe*


... still lacking the words to tell you how amazing this poem is ...
i shall use yours of poetic grace, in my place ...

"silent in its reckoning
a scream of heart--eight foot tall."


"tracing words I do not own
as close I'll ever be to touch..."

"crushed by stone of understand"

"by blood of heart in my own hand--
"Never will I love again."


may I repeat myself ?...(or you,-I should say)

***"tracing words I do not own
as close I'll ever be to touch..."***


oh baby ... my oh my  ...
I'll e-ya when I can stop stuttering ...
love you for this one me poet twin of heart
me

"she calls me baby ...
she calls everybody baaaaby".
~jc mellencamp~ ;)


doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
3 posted 2001-01-25 10:06 AM


ME neither! FORGET it! i am NOT doing it again and YOU can't make me and nobody else can either....*wink* (until tomorrow maybe... when i see the writing on the wall which says, doreen, you hopeless romantic, gotcha again! *g).... as always, harpo, your writing hits hard  
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-01-25 02:21 PM


add to the above stuttering ...

this poem should come with instructions ...
MUST BE READ ALOUD ...
must inhale the cadence and rhythm ...
must walk barefoot in the rhyme ...

ok... Im done worshiping ... for now anyway ...
unlsess of course I can cut and and paste me email here ...
*winkiewinkie*

later-me POEtry-gator  

"she calls me baby ...
she calls everybody baaaaby".
~jc mellencamp~ ;)


Paula Finn
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missouri
5 posted 2001-01-25 02:59 PM


You just took my breath away with this one girl
serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

6 posted 2001-01-25 10:08 PM


I do thank you all. Sometimes the writing on the wall is much more clear than the feelings in your heart. So thanks for the understanding, and HUGS TO FORUM.
Sven
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7 posted 2001-01-25 10:13 PM


you know. . . you've just been taking my breath away with your writing of late. . . and this is no exception. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone
8 posted 2001-01-25 10:34 PM


Oh, WOW, do I wish I could put this one in my book contest  
I suppose thats not allowed, hm?
Seriously, this is wonderful, just wonderful..
Sandra

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2001-01-26 11:07 AM


Sven...Sandra....I thank you much my compatriots of the lonely hearts club band....HUGS to ya both!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

10 posted 2002-02-16 09:52 PM


this is just as awesome now to me as it twas upon first read...tis no wonder me library is full of YOU ...

this is such a cool write me twin.

*skipping on to next poem in me library*

"Our scientific power has outrun our spiritual power.  
We have guided missiles and misguided men."

MLK

passing shadows
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displaced
11 posted 2003-01-27 12:12 PM


wow! you know...I know this well
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

12 posted 2004-06-13 01:58 PM


Doing the birthday bump from me library of rhyme divine Sen keepers.
Its your day..the forums shall be your marquee

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

13 posted 2005-07-18 12:34 PM


"tracing words I do not own
as close I'll ever be to touch..."
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

just doing some late night worshiping before I go to bed...
rhymes are like lullabyes. :squeeze

( this one still rocks me mothy mind)

Thank you clarity ... thank you frailty
Thank you consequence ...
Thank you ... thank you silence ...

Alanis

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