Open Poetry #12 |
Moonlight Dreams (Opinions Needed-preparing a book) |
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I would be as a warm perfumed moonbeam floating to earth glowing ever brighter as your arms surround me. I would be your dancer naked in the moonlight haunting, beautiful bathed in shadows and surreal love games. I would be your haven wherein you could be sheltered from the chill night air with the increasing warmth of my love. I would be all of these to you and so much more that remains un-conceived while I wait for you to let me... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
My opinion.......write as YOU write always and you cannot fail. I truely enjoy reading your works whether they be happy or sad or just about life in general. The only thing I can offer is "Don't forget to smile when they take your picture for the biography and make sure you send an autographed copy my way. I know.....a cowboy's way of trying to get a free copy. Your get published, I will buy it. Promise!!! BTW.......I would leave this one as is. It is wonderfully presented and it's beauty doesn't need to be refined at all. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 01-21-2001).] |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful piece. I love the flow. I hope that this person lets you be all these things to them soon. I don't have any corrections or anything for you, it looks great to me! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello catalinamoon, A'hhhh, so tender you write, anyone would answer yes to this writing. I liked this very much. BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"While I wait for you to let me." Yes very nice...James |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CatalinaMoon~ Nothing but admiration from this romantic corner ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Very sweet, anyone who doesn't publish this send em this way and I'll get em for ya ! It's a really great poem, everyones right, just be yourself and you can't fail . Thanks . L.of.L. Tommy . XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX Don't try, do or do not, there is no try . - Master Yoda - |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Catalina, Beautiful, one of your best. I will be looking for you at the book signing! Good luck.... Love, Elise |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Like Mark said..write as you always do hon..and good luck with your book..email me and tell me all about it HUGS ~V~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
Beautiful poem indeed. A wait that seemed to last forever from a qickened beat of heart to the slow breath of a sigh to the everlasting moment of a kiss a love awaits anxiously frozen in time lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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wandering Member
since 2001-01-21
Posts 92 |
Beautiful poem indeed. A wait that seemed to last forever from a qickened beat of heart to the slow breath of a sigh to the everlasting moment of a kiss a love awaits anxiously frozen in time lost in thought, found in words. wanderer |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderfully written. enjoyed muchly. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Sandra, no changes needed, just smile for the publicity photo. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I really liked this one Sandra. . . I like the form that you used here. . . what you would be if only you were allowed to be. . . the waiting of it all. . . It's perfect. . . just send me a copy!! --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sandra, Every reply ahead of mine had the right idea. This one is absolutely perfect just the way it is........save me a copy, girlfriend!!! Follow your dreams... Follow your heart... Let them be your guides... ~~~ Sunny ~~~ |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is for sure a keeper. I loved it! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I absolutely agree with everyone else....this is wonderful as it is.....please do allow us to know where and when....I want to buy one myself Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I too wish for all of this to come true for you and for love to let you offer all you desire openly! (kiss on cheek) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much, I hope everything is well with your book! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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