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Sunshine

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0 posted 2001-01-20 08:28 AM

When Poets Perceive

in combine
thoughts entwine
like limbs
around a lover
how'd he know
that she'd know
him better
than any other

and clicking her thoughts
as they race off,
to send a message
of sorts
hoping that somehow someday
like a rifle's report
someone would hear
loud and clear
the message she was clicking
while that clock
that loudsome clock
kept on insistently ticking

to be lent then back to childhood
to when the days were long
to match her daddy's stride
to hear him sing his song
for she would dream again
and maybe plan things right
oh let her see her yesterday
when the future seemed bright…

she rushes forward into the day
hurriedly whisking past the noise
seems like thousands command her time
leaving little time for selfish joys
but an inner thought is searching
and she wishes for the time
then suddenly she's latching
onto words that rhyme

in combine
thoughts entwine
like limbs
around a lover
how'd he know
that she'd know
him better
than any other

there's that thought again
she waves her hand to dispel it
wonders where the words
come from
and whatever would compel them,
wonders when her musings
will be done
wonders where they're
coming from
these words that haunt her soul

age old questions taunt her
today's fallacies flaunt her
she hurriedly casts delusions aside
hugs reality close to her hide
wondering when will
this wild ride
buck her off into the morrow
wondering when the sorrow
will stem this surly tide

in combine
thoughts entwine
like limbs
around a lover
how'd he know
that she'd know
him better
than any other

you've heard her sigh
you've sighed for her
you've walked there,
in her shoes
you know like she
in reality
must do what she must do
so you sit and ponder
and ramble a note
hoping that she'll read
what you wrote
for you would have her chase
this goal
as she wanders to dream
by the shoal

in combine
thoughts entwine
like limbs
around a lover
how'd he know
that she'd know
him better
than any other

as you entreat her to
"write on!"

01.20.01

Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2001-01-20 08:39 AM

"age old questions taunt her
today's fallacies flaunt her
she hurriedly casts delusions aside
hugs reality close to her hide
wondering when will
this wild ride
buck her off into the morrow
wondering when the sorrow
will stem this surly tide"

You speak to many with these beautiful musings Karilea ... for you've touched a part of me in these words as well. There is much depth in these lines, wonderful words sweet poet (and a lovely inspirational tribute ... write-on).

Best wishes,
/Kit

doreen peri
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2 posted 2001-01-20 10:21 AM

WOW! ... the girl can WRITE!

...loved it, k

you want to be a writer, don't know how or when, find a quiet place, use a humble pen-paul simon

Irish Rose
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3 posted 2001-01-20 10:35 AM

a wonderful encouraging poem. Thank you for posting it.

Kathleen

Martie

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4 posted 2001-01-20 10:37 AM

Karilea--You write with such depth and wisdom, my friend.

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2001-01-20 10:42 AM

Karilea,
This one is a keeper, I agree with both of the above. *L*

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6 posted 2001-01-20 10:45 AM

beautifully sereal and well thought out. Poetry at it's best. Very nice Sunshine I loved the way this is written
Rich

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7 posted 2001-01-20 11:06 AM

love all these wonderful lines....great poetry.
fabulous piece.

Charisma

Marsha

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8 posted 2001-01-20 11:24 AM

Kari love, always write on dear heart, or I'll set the squad on you. Utterly wonderful piece love, and of course I love it, when don't I. And I really love this bit,
Quote
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you've heard her sigh
you've sighed for her
you've walked there,
in her shoes
you know like she
in reality
must do what she must do
so you sit and ponder
and ramble a note
hoping that she'll read
what you wrote
for you would have her chase
this goal
as she wanders to dream
by the shoal

========================================
Oh wow love, truly outstanding, it really flies love.

Take care love
Mushy

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Sunshine

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9 posted 2001-01-20 05:46 PM

Thank you everyone...somehow,...I didn't think I'd be alone with these feelings...

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 01-20-2001).]

Irish Rose
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10 posted 2001-01-20 06:14 PM

says so much; means so much.

Kathleen

Sunshine

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11 posted 2001-01-20 09:39 PM

Thank you Irish...

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12 posted 2001-01-20 10:29 PM

indeed you're not my friend. . .

for you posess the wisdom of the ages. . .

wonderful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Sunshine

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13 posted 2001-01-20 11:52 PM

thank you Sven...

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14 posted 2001-01-21 01:17 AM

Hi SunShine,

"WOW" I loved this one, you amaze me.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

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15 posted 2001-01-21 02:57 AM

Beautiful. This likes me

Poeminister

"...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls-
O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love."
-Poe

Sunshine

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16 posted 2001-01-21 05:22 PM

Thank you both, very much...{~,^}

Mistletoe Angel

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17 posted 2001-01-21 05:27 PM

(sigh) Wow, this was very well-written, dear Sunshine! You have described the poets thinking and musing here very well! Yes, let our pen be our sword, in which we inscribe every thought down upon paper! Let love's ink bleed across the paper, smiling to the reader! Yes, excellent poem, my friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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18 posted 2001-01-21 05:52 PM

Hunting for a word - "WOW" seems best = so I'll leave it at that - Wow wow wow wow!!!

Sunshine

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19 posted 2001-01-21 11:09 PM

Noah, Mr. Yeats...in your individual ways, you both exuded enthusiastically, and I thank you!...

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