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The crystal Ball |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Crystal Ball (this may be a repost...it is also a rewrite) She was fragrant with dreams, you could see them glistening, dreams like red clicking nails, and just so perfect red mouth, dreams she held enshrined like the pearl in the dimple of her neck. She swept the floor with the silken slither of her dress, left a mark across the dust. She had come here with a question I could see that too, lean and hungry vulnerable eyebrows with questions about love, about the man with the dark hair and eyes that held midnight. Her voice was so pure it vibrated the cobwebs in the corner with its bell and she only said hello, but I heard her dream and saw her laying spread and new with desire, giving complete. Then I lost her to haze and a smoke filled room where in shadow a slumped shoulder crossed in front of a window, and it hurt to see the tree outside filled with blackbirds. Time is a robber I thought and she turned and looked back, thank you for your time she said into my surprise. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whoosh...what a whirlwind of emotion....wow! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Martie~ fabulous read, I really enjoyed this  ~HUG~ Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
The mystique of Martie~ ... What a wonderfully captivating read, my friend. Makes me want to head for Cassadaga, FL, and the readers of thought. *Hugs*, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I like this muchly. Wonderful writing. Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you are one fine writer, martie... i've admired your writing for a long long time.... this piece is very well done... makes me want to clean out the attic, though, so i'll have to read it the second time tomorrow... hehe *g |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Excellent my friend. I am truely amazed at the topics you come up with and then even more amazed at the beauty you put into everyone of them. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine--click your heels together three times. Tracie--I'm so glad you enjoyed this..and thanks for the hug...hugs back. Marge--Oh do it, and let me know how it goes. Thankyou so much Poeminister. Mark--If you are amazed...that please me. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Doreen--A compliment coming from you pleases me more than you know..for I admire your talent a great deal...but about the attic, I don't have one. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Martie this is a great story, very interesting and with that mystical tone. I like the way you re-did it. Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She had come here with a question I could see that too, lean and hungry vulnerable eyebrows with questions about love, about the man with the dark hair and eyes that held midnight. Her voice was so pure it vibrated the cobwebs in the corner with its bell and she only said hello, but I heard her dream and saw her laying spread and new with desire, giving complete. ====================== you write her so well ... we can see her...hear hear..smell her ... this is so way cool Martie ... awesome descriptive writing ... and those last lines...IMPACT girlie!! anybody ever tell ya your good at this poetry stuff??  When to the sessions of sweet silent thought, I summon up remembrance of things past ... I sigh the lack of many a thing I sought. ~Shakespeare~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"She was fragrant with dreams" I already knew another masterpiece poem was coming from Martie And you always draw us into the scene. You take a small piece of life and somehow involve us in an unknown story, in which we know but don't really know the ending. A rare gift of talent. Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your poetry is always such a vivid display of emotion and imagery....great write ~ Ruth www.angelfire.com/pa/OriginalMinds/index.html |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sandra--thanks for the reply...I'm glad you stopped to read it. Janet--Thanks for always seeing so clearly...your replies are always a joy. Liz--Certainly not a masterpiece, but your wonderful reply sure makes me smile...thanks. Ruth--thanks, so glad to see you here again..Hope to see more of you. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Martie, you always write so well, and never cease to amaze and this is no exception... Enjoyed mucho. jwesley |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Martie, This is one terrific writing. Many emotions, and very well done. BC |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Martie! I recall the original...how do you take perfection and make it even better? Denise |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Once more I'm Overwhelmed - Like Delta Dawn - but SO much better |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
James--Thanks for saying such nice words, in Spanish and english...muchas gracias. Bill Charles--I don't often get a chance to tell you thank you for reading...now I do. Denise--You have an amazing memory...and you always make me feel like a poet. Hi Bill--I always love your comments...sort of make my day, you know? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Her voice was so pure it vibrated the cobwebs in the corner with its bell and she only said hello, but I heard her dream and saw her laying spread and new with desire, giving complete. Then I lost her to haze and a smoke filled room where in shadow a slumped shoulder crossed in front of a window, and it hurt to see the tree outside filled with blackbirds. Oh Martie, Thanks for sharing this wonderous poem dear. You totally amaze me. I love it Maree |
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