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Fading Among the Mist
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Fading Among the Mist |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain 
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 Fading Among the Mist I hear your voice in the whispering winds While teetering on the brink of past and present Mist rising cold and harsh Chilling the hot crimson memories that leave one more trail down my cheeks When did you stop believing you loved me? Was it while we still held one another's hand along the path of false happiness? Did we only come together to say "good-bye" I looked out into the whirlpool so many times since that moment, wishing the swirling waters could have taken your words...could have swallowed all the hurt Now I see your face among strangers, feel your kisses within the swaying of the trees and I'm once again, just lost among the mist Little emerald orbs bouncing from there... to here Crying out loud, only you don't listen You said, "good-bye" and let go of my hand Only I still walk the path, and I still hold your hand among the mist, within the swirling waters I want to be ... and fade away the pic, is Niagara Falls, where these thoughts were born, in August '00 "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
packed with an emotional punch.......hitting directly into the heart.......hugs to you  -SEA |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh, dear one, this was sad! It must be so hard feeling these ghosts of love within you after breaking away! Oh, I pray you find new love very soon, which will forever blossom in you! Excellent poem! Thank you for sharing, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Ever more, you amaze me...ever more, ever more. Robert Joseph ~enb~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Snow, WoW! Whispers of love's echoes in a lovely setting, heart wrenching but also well written. Tender render from the sender Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
A very moving write filled with much expression of love and sadness of a goodbye... Thank you SNOW for sharing this with us... *~coco~* |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'I looked out into the whirlpool so many times since that moment, wishing the swirling waters could have taken your words...could have swallowed all the hurt Now I see your face among strangers' Oh man, does this affect me at this particular point in time. Excellent write, Snow! sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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emmalouise Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 26 |
Snow... I missed this in its first incantation, so I just had to say what a powerful effect this had on me this evening...I guess the longing-for-a-lost-love theme is suiting my mood tonight... |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you all for your comments on this piece. each one is very special to me. Thank you, Snow |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Very good, Snow! Nathan |
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Wolf777 Junior Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 20 |
YOU could never fade. Once more you show the beauty of your heart through your words. Amazing, you. Get the idea yet??? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That treacherous thing called love...when it leaves it doesn't disappear, a thick heavy residue remains in the core of the heart and it's so hard to get rid of....yes it makes one feel like fading away into the mist away from all of it....good poem!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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