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She is like catching lightning
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She is like catching lightning |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Elusive is she Whom I try to touch Or describe for my mind To somehow memorize every detail So as to emblazon upon my eye And keep her there forever Or at least until I die Is it that my hand is too slow, Or too far to actually reach? It could be my reaction delayed By the desire which makes me seek She has so many dark secrets In which I wish of her to speak And when she lights up She lightens all the dark clouds With brilliant radiance Taunting those who are angry and proud And dressing them up In a bright, burning blue shroud She is fire in the sky She is electric heat in the air All things love and worship her All things everywhere And I am just one small being Who wants to catch her there Though she burns my reaching hand If it should stray too possibly near Such concentrated intensity Yet I do not cower in useless fear Not even from her anger, As I shield my deafened ears I could spend eternity Chasing her through the sky Grasping at nothing finally, Yet still willing to try As long as the chance remains To catch her somehow before I die |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is beautiful as well as romantic!  I really enjoyed this!  -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like this one. . . I've caught lightning before. . . you just have to use the right gloves. . .  Great poem! -------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This is wonderous writing. I love the feeling behind this, and the adoration. Can I be your willful breeze, Come to touch, Your heart to ease? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And when she lights up She lightens all the dark clouds With brilliant radiance Taunting those who are angry and proud And dressing them up In a bright, burning blue shroud ========================= Though she burns my reaching hand If it should stray too possibly near Such concentrated intensity Yet I do not cower in useless fear Not even from her anger, As I shield my deafened ears I could spend eternity Chasing her through the sky Grasping at nothing finally, Yet still willing to try As long as the chance remains To catch her somehow before I die ============= superb use of metaphor here to express the longing, devotion and desire ... awesome imagery. written so that the reader feels the intensity and depth of the emotions intense is definatly the adjective for this poem. excellent work jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 01-16-2001).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
absolutely stunning.... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sir, this has a romantic magic feel to it.. may we publish it in the Valentine's issue of Digital Passions? Please?????? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sir, please heed PoetdeVine's plea...submit this for the Valentine issue...it is.... splendid... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
PK, this is such a beautiful poem... Thank you for the delightful read... *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 01-17-2001).] |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Wow, I am so surprised to see such responses to this. I am truly honored. You must know that this one is special to me in that it was the first one in awhile that was written all at once, and just seemed I was dictating. You all know what I mean, that's why I thank you all so much. And, Poet deVine...I would enjoy being in the Valentine's issue. Just keep me posted so to speak. *S* |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you..you should go to the main site and register to get it! If not, I'll forward a copy to you. Do you want PoeticKnight as your name on it? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
fabulous! |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
PoeticKnight... Simply lovely.. I could feel so much, All the emotions in this.. Maybe I can keep this one? Hugs ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
PoeticKnight--This poem is awesome...with beautiful imagery and metaphore...JM said it best...great work! |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you, ladies. and, you LL, feel free. *S* [This message has been edited by PoeticKnight (edited 01-18-2001).] |
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