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In Your Eyes
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In Your Eyes |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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In Your Eyes In your eyes You say its lies That we didn’t hear The falling tear Or touch your heart We’re blown apart In your eyes In your sight You say its right That we don’t hold Your hearts mould Or have the touch We’ve lost so much In your sight In your mind You say its kind That we can’t think You’d write souls ink Or feel your pain We’re not sane In your mind In your view You say its true That we don’t fly Your soul up high Or feel the heat We’re not neat In your view Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
In my eyes I say it's true there will never be another you In my eyes your words of light will always be for what is right In my eyes you are indeed a friend to all planter of seed In my eyes your Phoenix rises tearing away all disguises In my eyes you'll always be Phoenix flying forever free See what you do love?? Excellent poem. . . just wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Vandana, thank you muchly. Take care Mushy  Sven love, now that is excellant and it should be posted in it's own right, please do, it will get a far bigger audience love. And it truly deserves it. This was just a little play about with brevity, I can't say it suits me, a little too confining. I know it gives the reader leeway in interpretation, but I don't know if I want the reader to have that much leeway. And as I've said you can do brevity soooooo much better than I can love. Always you exceed my expectations with something better and better. Utterly first class Oh and thank you love, but yours is better. Honestly Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Awesome write dear friend -SEA |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Beautiful poem! I love the way you put this together, and the lovely voice within it, it flowed so very well! Thank you for sharing, my friend! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Circe love, the idea was it was supposed to be like raindrops, and I don't know if it really does love. Thank you as always Take care Mushy Noah love, thank you, I think you may be being over generous with your praise my friend. But thank you anyway Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marsha, what sparkling, glistening paindrops you have painted, and it's almost a cinquain round. Write on! Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Loved the style and flow in this Marsha! It's so great to see you stretching that pen. You've followed the theme perfectly ... really well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I loved the rhyme scheme in this, and the words Sven penned are true. Excellent Liz |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Great writing....great touch There are no limitations on you....this shows this Love to read what you write Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is remarkable....I'm really liking your new approaches to "less is more"... |
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Learner's Permit New Member
since 2001-01-17
Posts 9Australia |
Love the rhymne |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry love, oh love, give over do, 'twas nothing, less than nothing, it was me playing. If less is more, if I try an empty space would that count. Or only if I put someone elses name on it. Yes love I know Take care love Slushy Kit love, thank you so very much, as I said this is just me playing at being an aspiring poet. But I do appreciate your encouragement. Take care love Mushy Elizabeth love, thank you are far too kind, truly you are. And I thank you so very much, but I think you and Sven are looking at me through rose coloured glasses, I'm really not that special. Take care love Mushy Pepper love, you always say the sweetest things, and I really don't deserve them honestly. I was trying to get the effect of rain drops, or tears even, except they are a little large for tears. Thank you again love Take care Mushy Kari love, that's it then I can put my feet up for the rest of the month? You surely don't want me to do any more? Good grief dear heart, I'll keel over with exhaustion. (I can feel myself going now, so I'd better look for something soft to land on ) No not a doctor love, I said soft, not in serious need of a brain!! Do pay attention love. Take care love Majestic exhausted Marsha Learner's Permit, thank you so very much, welcome to Passions, I'm sure you'll love it here. This is where all the best poets are. (That's not counting me, but the rest of them are extreamly talented) If I have any advice for you it is to read and read and read as much as you can. For that can only ever help you to see the beauty held here. And also enjoy yourself. Don't listen to me moaning to Kari, she thinks I need to stretch myself. And the truth is I do, which is why I'm moaning love. Have fun and thank you again Take care love Marsha (Mushy is my nickname, they call me that because I often write really mushy poems )Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
WOW! |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Marsha, Beautifully done. Cheers. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Marsha~ I just loved the presentation, the rhyme, the flow and the message in this - very well done! I echo Sven's words  Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Doreen love, thank you, an undeserved Wow but I thank you anyway. Take care Mushy Daniel J D, thank you so very very much, I do appreciate it truly I do. Take care Mushy Melissa love, thank you too. You are being overly generous love, this really was just a gentle play about with forms. I do thank you though, lots Take care love Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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