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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
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of Depression

0 posted 2001-03-24 09:40 PM


At twilight, softness mingles,
With part dark, and still some light,

In moonlight, touching tingles,
Questions fade, quiet of night,

At sunrise, she finds an empty bed,
In harsh light, alone she cries.

Gloom


© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
RMW
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since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

1 posted 2001-03-24 10:28 PM


Gloom,

I've just been enjoying re-reading (several times) the first line. I especially like its rhythm...and the way it seems to almost end right there.

Bob

Katherine Chandler
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since 2001-03-07
Posts 280
Florida, USA
2 posted 2001-03-25 01:54 PM


Very well written, sad but still.. a fine poem. Kate


Blessings

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17
Posts 859
Seattle, WA, USA
3 posted 2001-03-26 03:59 AM


Short, sweet rhythm.

"I am not now that which I have been."

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