Open Poetry #12 |
Dear Mister Editor........#1 |
Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Dear Mister editor; I found an error in the news that I would like to mention With hopes that you are kind enough to give it your attention, For, on the page announcing deaths, I found it rather queer That, though I searched from start to end, my name did not appear. Although it is a small mistake, I feel, in my condition, That I deserve at very least a little recognition. I can't believe you didn't know that I had passed away. You spelled the name right of my wife we buried yesterday. Or did you think those left behind can just go right on living, Faced with only emptiness and nothing left for giving? Taken from the only thing that kept my heart alive, How is it possible you'd think that I could still survive? Your writers on the evening shift must have heard the sound My torn heart made the moment that they placed her in the ground. Perhaps they thought a cold wind rose and blew with icy breath Instead of knowing it was me within the throes of death. Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight. Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side For, though I breathe, I feel as if I were the one who died. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is heart-wrenchingly beautiful in every form. Kathleen Blake |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Balladeer~ So tenderly you touch my heart with this one. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
grief and mourning take unusual form and yet it is all ache, pain, sorrow you show that here with a childlike eye to loss |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OH man...well now Im just crying...this HURTS |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I felt evry single word of this. Over and over. So true, Joyce |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
This was beautiful. Heartwrenchingly so. |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible Michael, there is so much power in this piece, I thought my heart would break just reading. Wonderful expression and composed with such clarity of emotion. I adore the way your mind works. Perfection in cadence and rhyme as always my friend, beautifully written ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You, and only you, can write such sadness, so beautifully.... to find the one love....is all anyone could ever ask for.... thank you for sharing your heart again, 'Deer.... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This is a heart breaker, but you sure brought across the wrenching feelings of someone losing a loved one. Great work as always 'Deer. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
your talent never ceases to amaze me.... i am proud to know you you have a way of looking at life through the eyes of Love, with the tenderness and beauty of reality's hardships; you pull the reader into your heart which is a very beautiful place to be..... i remember this poem from before, i loved it then, i Love it even more now.... you are one fine writer, my 'deer Poet....thank you for reposting this and for all you are....(((((hug)))))) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Balladeer, must you make me cry this early in the day? You have such a magical way with words...... SEA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, I can't top what Doreen said but I can agree. You are one fine writer. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok...its hard to comment when typing through tears...but i guess that is a compliment in itself, that your words touch so deeply...this is the most beautiful expression of loss I have ever read...perfectly written...with deep appreciation of your work, talent and heart Mr. Balladeer...*jellybean curtsies softly* |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I miss your work and your presence here. Thanks for allowing us the honor of such beautiful poetry. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To all who read this, it will then become ... poetically clear. Never question or doubt ... you have read the words of a master ... once reading the poetry ...of our esteemed Balladeer ~~~~~~~~ OPEN 1???? so that means you have ALWAYS been amazing this one is a classic example of your talent and heart... and I am better for reading every word. oh you speak to me in riddles |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Balladeer, I can feel the pain, but also comfort in these words. I can't explain how that is. Beautiful in every word. Hugs, ME |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
The title gave me not a clue...so glad I read. This was incredibly, beautifully sad and well written. Speechless for a moment now. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all for such wonderful replies and the support you have always shown me....I appreciate it more than you can know.. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent writing Michael! The trauma of loss is so heart heavy! I love this traditional style of poetry that you use to get your thoughts across...... " Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight. Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side For, though I breathe, I feel as if I were the one who died" The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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