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Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

0 posted 2001-03-21 08:13 PM

being there with you
in front of the fireplace
would simply be bliss

and you know how
I feel about bliss
and about you

and if you're
not sure
watch the flame

for the flame
not only reflects
the depth of my desire
but also
the power of my passion

bring your hands closer
warm yourself

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

KokoStewartKoomoa
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since 2000-12-04

Posts 580
Waikiki, Hawaii

1 posted 2001-03-21 08:21 PM

Soft and tender . I could hear it in a whispered form.
Very romantic lovely as your poems always seem to be.
Aloha,

Passion,imagination
and intellect
running together...
Poetry in motion~~~

Aloha with
warmest regards, Koko

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

2 posted 2001-03-21 08:22 PM

~The flame speaks Sven,...in many ways. Enjoying this. *Peace you. (and thanks for visiting me).

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2001-03-21 08:28 PM

This is a very romantic poem. Very nice. Joyce

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-03-21 08:30 PM

You paint the warmest pictures in my mind. Thanks...once again.

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2001-03-21 08:37 PM

Perfect use of a metaphor, just lovely

Take care,
Melissa~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2001-03-21 08:39 PM

WHERE....was this....when winter STARTED?....

Ethan Halo
Senior Member

since 2000-04-28

Posts 793
on the roof again

7 posted 2001-03-21 08:46 PM

very romancing vibe...
the second stanza stands out to me... i dig it

wonderful!

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.
- Frank Sinatra

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

[This message has been edited by Ethan Halo (edited 03-21-2001).]

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 1144
New Orleans, LA

8 posted 2001-03-22 08:48 AM

Ah Sven, you are the romantic master. The title drew me in, and the last 2 lines were just so, just so...you know. I shall annoint thee King of Swoon.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2001-03-22 09:42 AM

Sven,
Although I read all I don't answer all, but you keep getting better and better.

Jellybean King
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 153
Jelly, Bean

10 posted 2001-03-22 10:16 AM

...utterly romantic piece...the use of the flame to describe your passion and the power of love was great...the last stanza was a killer...

"bring your hands closer
warm yourself"

...tender and intimate!

Jellybean King

Wilfred Yeats
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since 2000-08-04

Posts 2704
Wilmington, Delaware

11 posted 2001-03-22 10:40 AM

"watch the flame - warm yourself" -
Great closing lines - well done my friend

DreamLess
Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 92

12 posted 2001-03-22 12:31 PM

you know .. while reading your poem an image just jumped to my mind me with the one i love sitting in a cold night in the front of the fireplace watching the flames you talked about

that would be the thing i will do what ever it take to have this moment

WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

13 posted 2001-03-22 01:10 PM

Koko, thank you my friend. . . and I'm glad that you like reading. . .

SpitFire, yes it does, if only we'd listen. . . and thanks for stopping by. . . we should do this more often. . .

Joyce, thank you my friend. . .

JLR, you're welcome. . . once again. . .

Melissa, I knew that you would like this one. . . thank you. . .

Sunshine, sometimes, it doesn't have to be a cold December night. . . it can be a chilly March night. . .

Ethan, thanks a lot man!!!

PK, the King of Swoon?? Great. . . another title that I'll never be able to live up to!! LOL

Thanks!!!

Sy, thanks. . . that's good to know. . .

JK, thank you. . . glad that you enjoyed!!

Bill, thank you Sir. . .

DreamLess, thank you. . . but, be careful of what you might do to get this moment. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

RMW
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since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

14 posted 2001-03-22 02:56 PM

Sven,

The image of hands held out to a fire fascinates. Your poem is warm and quiet.

Bob

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

15 posted 2001-03-22 03:13 PM

Your words hold all the warmth a woman could ask for. This is beautifully written.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2001-03-22 03:46 PM

Ah isn't this romantic and nice...I could use a little of this...bet it wouldn't take long to get that first kiss....James

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

17 posted 2001-03-22 05:08 PM

Well now, I've missed reading on here, and I've missed reading your writing.

I love this, and I love the flame.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

18 posted 2001-03-22 07:03 PM

oh yes indeed, a beautiful piece from you....with such flow and passion....I love this Sven~....

Greeneyes~

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"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."
-Unknown

Just A Woman
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

19 posted 2001-03-22 09:10 PM

A beautiful picture to look into.

"When people show you who they are, believe them"

~Maya Angelou~

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

20 posted 2001-03-22 09:16 PM

RMW, thank you my friend. . . it's as it should be. . .

inot2B, thank you. . . I'm glad that it does. . .

James, you're right. . . it wouldn't take long if you were there. . .

. . . thank you my friend. . .

Temptress, thank you. . . I'm glad that you love the flame. . .

Greeneyes, thank you my friend. . . I'm glad that you can see it and that you enjoy it. . .

Just a Woman, thank you. . . it's a picture that doesn't belong on the mantle. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Tennessee Angel
Senior Member

since 2000-06-03

Posts 661
Tennessee

21 posted 2001-03-22 09:51 PM

Wow, Sven, how did I miss this one..
___________
Bring your hands closer
warm yourself
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Good stuff!

Mother_Earth
Senior Member

since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

22 posted 2001-03-22 09:54 PM

Wow, Sven, this is almost steamy enough to put out the fire! Nice and smooth. Hugs, Me

Katherine Chandler
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

23 posted 2001-03-23 12:03 PM

Sven, is there anything as romantic as a warm fireplace and two consenting adults? I think not, especially where love is involved. This one moved me. Thanks!

Kate

Blessings

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

24 posted 2001-03-23 12:57 PM

Angel, I'm glad that you didn't miss it. . . thank you my friend. . .

ME, thank you. . . glad that you enjoyed. . .

Kate, indeed there's nothing like this. . . if only we could have it more. . . thank you my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Irie
Senior Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

25 posted 2001-03-30 12:25 PM

~*Sigh*~

This is wonderful Sven.......
and a wonderful feeling to love one so much!

Well Done

~Sheri

"The things that come to those that wait may be the things
left by those who got there first"

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

26 posted 2001-03-30 10:38 AM

Sven,
I don't know how I missed this before? But saw the continuing thread.
I'll also contribute to this thread's continuation and say: Wonderful!!
Thanks

"The poet is the priest of the invisible."
Wallace Stevens

seraphin
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

27 posted 2001-03-31 11:31 PM

Oh Sven....this is wonderful.

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