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In The Chorus
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In The Chorus |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Those high school sweetheart days we loved, we fit together hand and glove. We sang in sunsets spilling gold I can't believe the songs we wrote. We hid behind the graveyard fence your searching kiss was so intense and my hearbeat skipped and whirled, oh you were a good time girl. You mothered me just like a boy I smothered you just like a toy. We were young and living dreams happy with our destiny. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes, we sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet. One on one a sculpture carved together we were modern art. A model for the world to see we'd sing of change with words of peace. We were clean and music deep just like moonlight on the sea. We lived the fairy tales of hope the brand new home the future wrote. We built great plans for future tasks working on the dreams to last. Those growing years we spent together we thought they'd go on forever. But the nature of the boy singing songs telling stories opened doors beyond the stage here tommorrow gone today. When the praises came to rest I tried to fight them with my best but the change from boy to man blankets over younger plans. The years upon your throbbing breast have stayed with me at heart no less. But I booked away to other spoils the freedom from our midnight oil. Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift. But there's a lost and unheard verse that can't explain our love and work So I play us but there's no you, just smoke filled rooms and jaundice booze. When it comes down to the truth there was no gamble in our youth. Swept away by rushing tides we filled the needs we craved inside. But changes flow from buried streams and surface in the thoughts we breed. So now it's over past the end In the chorus I hear a friend. We were young and living dreams happy with our destiny. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes. We sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet. The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ Oh, Eric ... this is just a wonderful piece. 'we sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet' We hear the voice of the first-in-our-heart for all of time. Lovely touches to this one. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
two heart harmony---how I love that phrase! I love this poem (but ya KNEW I would) will e ya later with one of my infamous stories about "smoke filled rooms and jaundice booze." Enjoyed muchly ethome! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I remember the good time boy with brown hair and brown eyes and the curliest long eyelashes that all the girls wanted to have looking into their eyes.... I wonder which beach he is sitting on now.... that is the memory this song evoked, Ethome...who is to say that what this couple went through wasn't the paths they were destined to travel.... sometimes, there is no right or wrong in a relationship...we should just be grateful we got to go down that road, if only for a little while.... this, my friend, is a definite keeper, because I can hear the music playing.... thank you for this treasure.... |
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OWG Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 155California |
Cool walk through life guy...I liked the mother smother part..shows youth in it's perfect clumsy..dug the view!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The years upon your throbbing breast have stayed with me at heart no less. But I booked away to other spoils the freedom from our midnight oil. Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift. But there's a lost and unheard verse that can't explain our love and work So I play us but there's no you, just smoke filled rooms and jaundice booze. When it comes down to the truth there was no gamble in our youth. Swept away by rushing tides we filled the needs we craved inside. But changes flow from buried streams and surface in the thoughts we breed. So now it's over past the end In the chorus I hear a friend. ============================ We sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet. ============================ you are so cool and you Rock!!! and this NEEDS to be mailed to Van ... cuz I can hear him laying-- your way cool reflections and melodies-- down in that wail of his E-babes...there are SO many cool lines in this........ "One on one a sculpture carved together we were modern art. "But the nature of the boy singing songs telling stories opened doors beyond the stage here tommorrow gone today." I tried to fight them with my best but the change from boy to man blankets over younger plans. The years upon your throbbing breast have stayed with me at heart no less. But I booked away to other spoils the freedom from our midnight oil. Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift. But there's a lost and unheard verse that can't explain our love and work So I play us but there's no you, just smoke filled rooms and jaundice booze. When it comes down to the truth there was no gamble in our youth. Swept away by rushing tides we filled the needs we craved inside. But changes flow from buried streams and surface in the thoughts we breed. So now it's over past the end In the chorus I hear a friend. This is awesome Eric....what a way cool moment of inspire.... what a write of heart soul wisdom and rhyme yea...that boy turned into a man...and one hell of a song writer too... needless to say this goes in my library of you   meWe wish ourselves beautiful, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethome, No sooner said then done No sooner done then none. No sooner none then dream No sooner dream then gleam. etc,etc,etc. Enjoyed the read. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy the read  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--Everything you write is my favorite..and I'd just like to say...JM said what I feel...so ditto!! |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I admit my younger days went very much like your poem read. I totally enjoyed the memories this poem evoked. KateBlessings Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I just love it when you sing...and this one sings straight to my heart sweet poet man...you are simply AWESOME!!!!!!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Had to come back to hear the music.... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Gotta admit.......I'm still thinking about the phrase: "two heart harmony"! You got this musician with that one!!! Loved it too! Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I have been away from the board for a little while and I have to say to all thank you so very much for the words of encouragement and inspiration...I feel overwhelmed by your wonderful replies.......I will get around to all individually.....thanks again! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is good...enjoyd reading your poem...James |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, you just made my heart sigh. What a lovely write. I so enjoyed reading this one ethome! Thank you so much for posting this. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Brilliant write, Ethome....I really enjoyed this!! Nathan |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Eric, any relationship that starts off with kisses behind a graveyard fence is gonna have problems! Wouldn't it be great if we could hold on to the joys of youth? excellent writing, sir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This brings back some memories and leaves me with those "Where are they now?" wonderings. *S* Excellent writing... I rarely read one of your poems without hearing music. *S* |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
enjoyed reading this wonderful piece as it made me smile reading while remembering my youth. Thanks for sharing. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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