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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-03-18 10:56 AM

It only took a moment for her
to vanish into thin air
They searched and searched
but could not find her anywhere

The news force rallied round
and posters immediately sprang up
Volunteers combed the streets
vowing never to give up

Her family sat in silent shock
disbelief held back the tears
that someone would be so cruel
to take a child of only six years

Days passed without a clue
Then suddenly a month went by
still the child was not found
but the family continued to cry

A year went by with no luck
no trace, no break, no clue
Life went on, it had to you see,
there was only praying left to do

A hiker found the body
hidden deep in the desert brush
Police and film crews were alerted
and descended in a rush

Outside the parents home
they stood crying in the rain
relief mixed with grief tonight
to shadow a parent’s pain.

Rain fell as she was laid to rest
given to God, she forever sleeps
sadness felt in all mortal hearts and
for lost children, mother earth weeps

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2001-03-18 11:03 AM

An extremely sad event. PDV, I'm thinking that a non-rhyming treatment for this one would be more suited to the pain of which it's relating. In fact, the rhythm is perhaps to lilting to reflect what was really being felt by those who suffered this horrendous loss. There's no indication as to what type of critiquing you are comfortable with, but I felt this to be such an important story that I was compelled to give my opinion...just in case it would help. I hope you don't mind.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2001-03-18 11:03 AM

DeVine one,
Excellent write, sad poem.

Mother_Earth
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since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

3 posted 2001-03-18 01:11 PM

Poet deVine, you are so right that the Mother Earth cries. What we have done to this earth and those who live on this earth, is enough to make her cry non-stop! When we have a sunny day, does that mean there is no reason to cry or is she all cried out? A very thoughtful poem. Hugs ME

Mabel A. Dilley
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since 2001-03-17

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Seattle, WA, USA

4 posted 2001-03-18 01:20 PM

I have no doubt with the number of abductions, and senseless crime of today's life, that indeed the earth weeps. More than compounding the problem with our silence, we as a body of humans need to become motivators and participants within our communities. What we see now is only compounded by our apathy. Very important write.

"I am not now that which I have been."

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-03-18 01:56 PM

PoetdeVine~
How delicately your verse traced the pain~

Sadly, each day brings fresh tears to fall
from mothers and fathers of this earth.

Very tender - very, very touching.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-03-18 01:58 PM

excellent deVine. . . the storytelling in this one is really well done. . .

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Trillium

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since 2001-03-09

Posts 12098
Idaho, USA

7 posted 2001-03-19 07:00 PM

Very good presentation of an extrememly sad event! You read stories like this so often and feel for the families involved.

Betty Lou Hebert

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2001-03-19 09:41 PM

Thank you all for you kind comments. I hold my breath every time a child goes missing. There was a young girl almost two years ago that stood IN FRONT of her house to wait for the ice cream man. She was alone for maybe 5 minutes while her sister ran inside to get more money..........and she was taken. They haven't found her yet.

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

9 posted 2001-03-20 07:30 PM

What a sad and heart wrenching poem you have written. It was beautifully done...Sue.

Suetang

Meadowmuse
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10 posted 2001-03-20 08:22 PM

A grim, gripping and very important poem, one that reminds how very real the horror, how very real the threat. As a society, we are failing to protect and educate our wee ones. No wonder She weeps. Thank you, Sharon.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

11 posted 2001-03-20 08:41 PM

Poet deVine - I also weep with the earth for the lost child. No more can I say.

BC

Elizabeth

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12 posted 2001-03-20 09:47 PM

I think she weeps for all children...or, for that matter, for anyone. This is beautiful.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

13 posted 2001-03-20 10:04 PM

I raised my children in a smaller more trustworthy world. I wanted them to keep their innocence as long as possible. I know that is denied to the parents of today. They must tell their babies that all is not good in this world they have inherited. So sad. Joyce

Red-uni
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Georgia, USA

14 posted 2001-03-21 12:33 PM

An awesomely written poem, showing the sadness. An angel must shed a tear when a wee one is hurt.
Red

Irish Rose
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15 posted 2001-03-21 03:47 PM

and the heavens opened up to receive the precious spirit..........

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada

16 posted 2001-03-21 06:45 PM

This tore my heart out PDV! I can't say anything more than what you've written,,it's a cloud that hangs over our society and it's not very nice...thank you for having the courage to remind once more that we are in a state of imperfection.....so sad but excellent delivery!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

17 posted 2001-03-26 08:18 AM

how your words touched me, heartfelt words.
thank you for sharing.

((hugs))
Charisma

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

18 posted 2001-03-26 06:54 PM

I don't want to even try to imagine such pain...hard not to join mother earth in her tears while reading this one...
well done Sharon..

Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

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