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Heartstarter
Junior Member

since 2001-03-14

Posts 39

0 posted 2001-03-17 10:47 AM

Were it not for the poet
the critic would cry,
there would be no more sunsets
to tear from the sky;
no more trembling hearts
to lay bare on the page,
no more ships to set sail
or desires to uncage.
There would be no well-hidden
paths to discover,
no more metaphorical twists
to uncover;
there would not be the first
hackneyed phrase to excise,
not the first trite idea
to appall or apprise.
No more voices to write with
pens dipped in years,
no laughter, no sorrow,
no conquests, no fears.
There would be no past
for the future to find,
no unspoken thought
would have been left behind.
Were it not for the critic
the poet would lose,
there would be no Pygmalion
to dance with the Muse.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-03-17 10:52 AM

"There would be no past
for the future to find,
no unspoken thought
would have been left behind."
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I liked this a lot.....great thoughts here

SEA

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-03-17 11:15 AM

What SEA said....and even more.....Bravo!

Kerri S
Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 61
Rhode Island

3 posted 2001-03-17 11:19 AM

I liked this poem alot. A great read

Kerri

Heartstarter
Junior Member

since 2001-03-14

Posts 39

4 posted 2001-03-17 12:25 PM

Thank you all!!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-03-17 01:06 PM

Were it not for the poet
the critic would cry,
there would be no more sunsets
to tear from the sky;
no more trembling hearts
to lay bare on the page,
no more ships to set sail
or desires to uncage.
There would be no well-hidden
paths to discover,
no more metaphorical twists
to uncover;
there would not be the first
hackneyed phrase to excise,
not the first trite idea
to appall or apprise.
======================

This is a very cool and well conceived poem
What a great twist..the poet and critque.
Great use of poetic examples and comparisons to bring us full circle.
I enjoyed the thought that went in to this
and the creative writing process...
great wit!!
perfect cadence as well
Welcome To Passions Heartstarter..
its so nice to meet you..

I look forward to mmore of your work.
take care
jm

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Heartstarter
Junior Member

since 2001-03-14

Posts 39

6 posted 2001-03-17 01:24 PM

Thank you,jm,for such a gracious comment!

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-03-17 01:52 PM

HeartStarter~
What a lovely marriage of thought.
A gracious read.
Thank you for sharing.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2001-03-17 03:16 PM

You've taken an excellent idea and written it very well. *S* Welcome to Passions!

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