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Heartstarter
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0 posted 2001-03-17 02:33 AM



I am not an artist because
Julie smokes Marlboros.
She wears a cherry jumper and cherry shoes,
a ghost sweater and ghost stockings
and carries the box of Marlboros.
Julie,lying on my bed,
spills blood and snow on my
rasberry and coconut spread,
smoking.
So I paint the picture.
And the critics say whatsa matter kid,
you don't got no other crayon
but red?

I am not an artist because
the strange boy has a fat neck.
He wears the same shirt everyday on the bus.
From the collar grows a neck
wider than his head.
So I split the neck and head on paper
and the experts say there ain't no one
looks like that why
dont'cha draw flowers?

If Julie smoked Salems the portrait
would have been balanced.
The heavy red and white would have been
blown apart by a mentholated breath
of color.
The critics would have said
"This carnival of rainbows combines the
double enjoyment of a striking portrait
and today's pop art."

If the boy,instead of a fat neck,
had been given big,round eyes,
the portrait would be seen as a
charming face.
The experts would have said
"This visage expresses the whimsical fantasy
of a child found in an adult's face.
His warm eyes thrill us with a
'je ne sais quoi' sensation."

I am not an artist because
the critics and the experts do not understand
That truth is beauty
and beauty is truth
That is all there is on earth
That is all there is to know.


Acknowledgement to "Ode to a Grecian Urn"


© Copyright 2001 Heartstarter - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-03-17 02:38 AM


HeartStarter~
Oh, my ... this is a wonderful image-laden beginning
in this poetic circle of friends.
Welcome to Passions.
Looking forward to more of this creativity.
~*Marge*~


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Heartstarter
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2 posted 2001-03-17 02:40 AM


Thank you for such a warm and gracious welcome!
Packratmike
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3 posted 2001-03-17 02:40 AM


Wow heartstarter.....this is one terrific read! Imagery, humor, great well-organized narrative style. Loved it!!!

"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

Heartstarter
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4 posted 2001-03-17 02:45 AM


Thank you so much,Mike.
Sunshine
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5 posted 2001-03-17 08:32 AM


Had to read this three times, and indeed, saw the art through your eyes. Welcome to Passions! Check your e-mail for a special message!

Karilea
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I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound.
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Celeste
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6 posted 2001-03-17 09:01 AM


I applaud!!! You make me yearn to paint. A wonderful entrance into the group. Welcome!

"The way I see it, if you want the rainbow, you gotta put up with the rain."

Heartstarter
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7 posted 2001-03-17 10:46 AM


Thank you all!!! I worry a lot that some of my work is too lengthy..but sometimes less does not seem to be enough.Thank you!
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8 posted 2001-03-17 10:48 AM


Welcome!! This was really a cool read.....enjoyed SEA
Heartstarter
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9 posted 2001-03-17 12:26 PM


Thank you,SEA!
Kethry
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10 posted 2001-03-18 02:10 AM


Heartstarter,
Welcome to passions. I like the truth imagery in this poem.
Write on
Kethry

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jonmcm
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11 posted 2001-03-18 05:25 AM


Heartstarter,

A great poem, and such truth to what you write.

Cheers!
Jon

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12 posted 2001-03-18 04:12 PM


Wow this is great,have you been here long?? Ever had any of your poetry published,i love your works!! Incredible!!

swamp

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Heartstarter
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13 posted 2001-03-18 09:36 PM


Thank you so much,SF...unpublished and skeptical that it's worth publishing.
Swamp¤Faeryie
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14 posted 2001-03-19 01:25 PM


i would buy it!! let me know if you ever do!!

swamp

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

jellybeans
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15 posted 2001-03-19 03:17 PM


*applauding* this is great...and yep I would say that we all here will beg to differ...you are an artist most extraordinaire
Ethan Halo
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16 posted 2001-03-19 03:50 PM


*floored*
absolutey amazing. the ciggarette imagery was awesome. i like the rhythm of the first stanza.

wonderful words, wonderful message. just what i've been looking for these days...

and WELCOME! hope you enjoy your stay here.

You gotta love livin, cause dyin's a pain in the ass.

"It don't mean a thing
if it ain't got that swing."

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