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Private Dance |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Private Dance He is waiting to read this, she knows he is…. like a private letter, between them…. he in her world, she in his… and he makes her want to be his private dancer… in remote chance remoter still the dance but still, for the romance she takes that stance he'll stand the chance and they to take the private dance that one that won't e'er be seen he'll call upon her in midnight dream she'll float to him on wings unseen to hold, then be held in grace, be graced she to smile into his face he to grasp her warm embrace he to take her up by small of back and she to feel his shift and tact his essence she breathes in her perfume, a transient sin her dress of roses pink in glow in sheerest silk her skin does show and length of limb to hip to shoulder keeps the room from getting colder and he in turn, in turn of crest has worn in dream his very best her hand lies there upon his chest in silent beat of love's caress in silence he reads of this, her dream in close of eyes, then it seems she's come to him, again, in romance to take up this, this private dance she'll take the stance he'll stand the chance for this one, most private, dance 01.27.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"he'll call upon her in midnight dream she'll float to him on wings unseen" Sunshine- Beautiful, enchanting write. I Love it! Poeminister "Awaiting welcome light of glory's gold, I search the night to fan salvation's spark." --Claire Brown Bower |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I can hear the music now my friend. . . wonderful. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I wish I had written this! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*Sighs* What a dance you weave with your sensual words! The flow, the flair and the rhyme is perfect. Just beautiful! Take care, Melissa~ The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
My grandma used to say that dancing was the vertical application of a horizontal idea..I think you just proved her right, Sunshine!! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well my goodness...thank you all for peeking in... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Sensual, lovely, carressing of the spirit. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sunshine, Perfect,,,,, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
he'll call upon her in midnight dream she'll float to him on wings unseen to hold, then be held in grace, be graced =============== he to take her up by small of back and she to feel his shift and tact his essence she breathes in her perfume, a transient sin her dress of roses pink in glow in sheerest silk her skin does show and length of limb to hip to shoulder keeps the room from getting colder and he in turn, in turn of crest has worn in dream his very best her hand lies there upon his chest in silent beat of love's caress in silence he reads of this, her dream in close of eyes, then it seems she's come to him, again, in romance to take up this, this private dance she'll take the stance he'll stand the chance ============================== I wish I had wrote this!!! I wish my muse was on fire like this!!! (need I say more)  "she calls me baby ... she calls everybody baaaaby". ~jc mellencamp~ ;) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
NowTHIS is a poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not only is it a great poem but it is by far the most sensual dance I have read and I bet he is waiting to take that dance with you. Superb penning as you might have guessed by now |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
There's not much more one can add that has not been expressed by our friends above but I will say this... I enjoyed reading your graceful poem of sensual flair... |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
OMG girl...this is just superb writing...what images you have placed in my head...its a good thing I cant sleep as it is LOL We all have wings...some of us don't know why |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Sorry it took so long to reply after reading this ... but I had to go out and role in a snow drift to bring the fever down lovely |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Some of you made me smile...some of you made me giggle...ALL of you make me happy!...thank you... |
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encre du coeur Junior Member
since 2000-12-24
Posts 15Florida |
Oh my! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
hey you!!!! do you have my password or something? you've been reading my email? my love letters? WHAT's UP with this???? geesh! how the heck do you know so much about me? .... good grief.... i guess i better check the security on my internet account........(great poem, girl) |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is a very sensual poem. I enjoyed the expression very much. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thanks everyone! |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'to hold, then be held in grace, be graced she to smile into his face he to grasp her warm embrace he to take her up by small of back and she to feel his shift and tact his essence she breathes in her perfume, a transient sin' This is just wonderful, sunshine! The romance just swept me away! sp  do I believe we'd be better off apart? |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Romance...in an armful. Joyce |
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Kerri S Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 61Rhode Island |
What a sensual poem. Great as always Sunshine. Kerri |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Did I miss this before? It is perfect. Romantic, sensual, and hopeful. Sandra If he asked me, would I dance with him? Around the floor, through the dark again? Oh indeed, if only he would say magic words, back in my arms, to stay! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
need I say I loved this? |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
I have to agree with Mark, this is writing, and such great writing it is. A a day keeps the world 'G.Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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robin-shep Junior Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 28northern California, USA |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I can tell this "came out!"...beautiful flow to this wonderfully subtle, and sensual piece. I loved it! Bravo. |
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