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Mike
Member Elite

since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

0 posted 2001-03-16 11:54 PM

At dawn,
Thadeus
with sleep still heavy
on
his eyes,
arose,
at sound of birds
first sing,
not yet awake,
in fog
of
his surroundings,
as empty winds
outside glass pane,
through
leafless boughs
in melancholy sang.
It had become,
begin
of
yet another day,
an imperceptible bump,
one cannot climb,
no matter what
you speak or do,
will confound you,
Thadeus,
in sockless feet,
stood
before the shuttered window,
whil'st
last vestiges of cloudless night
enshrouded
western sky.

[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 03-17-2001).]

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2001-03-17 01:06 AM

Oh my goodness, Mike...this is beautiful..I love the form...great poem!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

2 posted 2001-03-17 01:15 AM

It's like a quiet interlude just before the dawn...lovely.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2001-03-17 02:33 AM

Mike~

'not yet awake,
in fog
of
his surroundings'

*smiling* gently at the imagery~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

4 posted 2001-03-17 11:44 PM

Much here to digest, I believe. You have symbolized confinement and routine on several layers. Nice, this metaphorical free verse. It is interesting to see what we can do away from the creative confines of rhyme and meter, though always my first love. I'm glad you posted this one ~ thanks for it. (o:

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Butterflies_dont_cry
Member Elite

since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

5 posted 2001-03-18 08:02 AM

New concept...new format....same amazing
poetry...same effect...Mike no matter how
you weave it....it's still amazing!! You
draw a picture with your poetry and the
vision is so very clear...thank you for
weaving like you do~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2001-03-18 08:24 AM

'Tho, sweet poet
you wrote
in dark
know your
visions
envisioned
dawn's hark
and as
Thadeus
bumped about
I heard
from him
a little shout
of glee
for me
he said
"Mike wrote!"

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