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Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

0 posted 2001-03-16 11:21 PM

A new beginning so it seems,
Sofly love on starlight gleems,
So row me safely in the breeze,
Touch my heart and steal me, please.
To know that I am loved once more,
Knowing full your voice in store.
Swiftly moonlight harbors dreams,
Feeds my thoughts, softer themes.
I ache to be the one you need,
Seems so rare this new love's seed.
When troubles grip me and ensnare,
I know your heart is ever there.
Fingers tracing never wrong,
In the night we find our song.
From dated times to even now,
Shown our paths on love's wet brow.
So softly whisper your reprieve,
If all along you've me decieved.
Loves not lost if never had,
Intentions trusting, ever glad.

"This above all-ask yourself in the stillest hour of your night:MUST I write? Delve into yourself for a deep answer.

Rainer Maria Rilke
from "Le

Katherine Chandler
Member

since 2001-03-07

Posts 280
Florida, USA

1 posted 2001-03-16 11:24 PM

Very nice Jennifer, I admire poets who can rhyme comfortably..and you do!

Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2001-03-16 11:34 PM

To know that I am loved once more,
Knowing full your voice in store.
Swiftly moonlight harbors dreams,
Feeds my thoughts, softer themes.
I ache to be the one you need,
Seems so rare this new love's seed.
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Shown our paths on love's wet brow.
So softly whisper your reprieve,
If all along you've me decieved.
Loves not lost if never had,
Intentions trusting, ever glad.
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Jen.. i love this poem...
wonderful cadence...i was thinking as I read..
i recall more free verse from you in the past? ...
or my bad memory *S*
the imagery in this is well done
and the emotions are expressed poetically perfect...
those last 2 lines hit home
well done poetess
jm

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-03-17 07:43 PM

wow. . . this is wonderful. . . and you said that you couldn't rhyme well. . . who were you kidding???

this is excellent. . . and I hope that your turning point is for the better. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

4 posted 2001-03-17 08:48 PM

I'm glad you alll liked my attempt at rhyme. Once in a while it does come (although most of the time it falls short of the imagery I so adore including). So, the free verse Princess asks the queen (wherever she is) if this humble offering will be acceptable!