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Jellybean King
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since 2001-03-07

Posts 153
Jelly, Bean

0 posted 2001-03-16 03:07 PM

If today were my last
I would make peace with trees
Leaves, roots and branches
Fruits and all who know her

I've forgotten how
How she held me in her bow
Brushed hair from my eyes
With gentle leaves
Protected from rain
Autumn kisses
Indian Summer

Carved three hearts
One when we skinned our knees
Another when we were in blossom
Another when we were in love
Come, I must see
How they remain

Trace again our hearts
With fingers and eyes
Maybe then she'll forgive me
For scarring her so
With our careless love
Only to let you go

So, that's why I'm here
To make peace with trees
What brings you here my love?
What brings you so near?

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-03-16 03:10 PM

...to seek the sound of rustling leaves...

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2001-03-16 03:19 PM

JBK...This is wonderful...I love trees...and don't feel too bad about carving your name..that is part of what they do, they are keepers of love.

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

3 posted 2001-03-16 05:09 PM

This one tugged nicely.....thank you.

Packratmike

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-03-16 05:23 PM

This is amazing! I read it not knowing what to expect...from the name. Ok, trees, it was about trees. But it is about so much more...and what a noble thing to do, if it were your last day. You have honered nature as such a real part of your love.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2001-03-17 12:06 PM

Trace again our hearts
With fingers and eyes
Maybe then she'll forgive me
For scarring her so
With our careless love
Only to let you go
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very cool write JBK...
wonderful use of imagery and metaphor
and the poetic blending of nature and the emotions was well done...

"For scarring her so
With our careless love
Only to let you go"

such a cool bittersweet emotive line...
well done poet sir
jm

We wish ourselves beautiful,
we cry in the night.
Its not the love you fear ...
its the fall from the height.
~Edwin McCain~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-03-17 12:45 PM

Metaphorically speaking you know you touched the core of my contention with half the huge corporations in this world!...I have made peace with trees and wish more were aware of the abuse of nature, as we are depleting our own source of beauty. This was fastastic, carry on McDuff!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2001-03-19 10:44 AM

Lovely and bittersweet... well done! *S*

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

8 posted 2001-03-20 12:26 PM

This was so beautiful and kind of peaceful,lovely. To make peace with trees,how nice!! loved this!!

sammi¤

much madness is divinest sense,and much sense the starkest madness~Emily Dickinson

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

9 posted 2001-03-20 12:38 PM

this is a very nice piece
vivid and a sense of melancholy lingers through it as though woven in the tapestry of the moment

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

10 posted 2001-03-20 07:24 AM

I thoroughly enjoyed, hope to read more nature pieces from you, nature is my favorite theme.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

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