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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
One after the next My dreams,like dominos,fall Game...set...match...you win |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Ok, well...my timing sucks. I'll make the coffee. Dreams, dominoes, bridges...they all fall, sooner or later. Wish it wasn't so. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are so good at this,,,,loved the imagery here Paula! smile for me now?  |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
~Paula, after reading this senryu, the first words out of my mouth were "oh wow!" There is such power and defeat in so few words, I relate very deeply to this and applaud your talent to write a senryu such as this by using an often cliched metaphor - but you made it intense and expressed yourself very well. I do hope that this does not echo your personal life. Into the library this goes~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but I pick them up one after one after one let the games begin |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Hey, hey Paula this happens to me all the time. Perhaps so I can start all over again and some day get it right...James |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JLR...lol my timing sucks too...always seem to be one step behind...thanks serenity...  Glad you liked it girl...thanksMelissa...why thank you...I'm glad you liked it well enough to add to your library... Sunshine...yes lets begin again at the beginning...thanks sweet sister James...if you start singing that song Im gonna toss you right into the ocean LOL...you and me sooner or later we will get ot right I know...hugs to you sweet friend |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Tea it shall be. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Too, too sad, what a melancholy piece, superbly woven melancholy! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sad but cleverly done...I know the effect you're talking about! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
JLR...the kettles on VAS...thank you...if it made you feel that then I acheived something ethome...awwww sweet poet...Im truly sorry you know this feeling... |
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