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All Good Things |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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All Good Things Entice me please, with your cajole Fill me up and leave me whole Grant me laughter, allow me sing, Abide your words in my ear to ring Seek my asylum, leave me weak Fortunate am I in your keep You leave me loving only you This only gift is my I do For I would give you anything Then gift you great desires In my voice you hear the ting And embers flash to fires Sweep me up with your persuade Put our love forth on parade Let all who know give celebration As we revel in His creations For he has fashioned you, and I, To swallow up His world of sigh That in down deep of feathered nights We find sweet peace in moon’s pure light So entice me please, with your cajole As we would be each other’s shoal |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice, Sunshine! One line though, I think a different word would make it not seem a forced rhyme...perhaps 'world in sigh' rather than 'world of sigh' the way the collective you are sighing rather than an inanimate world, just my thought as I read |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
This is a great recitation of love and support at it's best. A spirit lifter! |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
Beautiful, beautiful flow. You always manage that so well!  "When people show you who they are, believe them" ~Maya Angelou~ |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Embers certainly flash to fires, I feel the emotion in your words, I enjoyed reading, thank you Regards, Olias. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Very nice sunshine. Very musical meter and i liked the rhyming. Nice thoughts for someone special obviously. You are Moderator Extrordinaire, I bow to you. *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea: "You leave me loving only you This only gift is my I do" Very romantic!!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ 'For he has fashioned you, and I, To swallow up His world of sigh That in down deep of feathered nights We find sweet peace in moon’s pure light' Oh, how perfectly unrehearsed. His world of sigh seems created just for moments like this. Beautifully portrayed emotions, sweet poet. *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Karilea! Lovely indeed!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is wonderful. . . it's like it flows from you. . . in a tender river of light. . . excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 I just love this.......this is how I feel about my Jon |
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Kerri S Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 61Rhode Island |
Very romantic poem. I enjoy reading all your poetry Sunshine Kerri |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I am swallowed whole in your cajole - need I say more? |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh but to feel this romantic, I loved this part the best: For he has fashioned you, and I, To swallow up His world of sigh That in down deep of feathered nights We find sweet peace in moon’s pure light, Just lovely |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
i am with mysteria on this...oh to feel like this...nice work ...really nice |
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