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Short Winter Day
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Short Winter Day |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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Short Winter Day There was a time I remember She looked so beautiful in the fallen snow I will never forget her Her twirls threw up snow and rain Like her, for that one second I could forgive all of my pain There was a time so cold To feel as if no world cared In darkness snow came so bold Pearls in the sky kept turning Images of her dancing Were content in returning There was a time like now Too long and warm a Summer day And I don't know how She has found me someway I thought that she forgot me After that short Winter day. Here it is, pick it apart as you wish. |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Images of her dancing Were content in returning" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Welcome!  this is fantastic! SEA |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome to Passions, fozzyozzy... We won't be picking on you on your first post - We'll wait till the next one... Let you settle in a bit... This one is a pretty nice entree to our forums, btw... Check your email for a special greeting...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Hi there I am new too, but want to welcome you to a great site, check it all out thought there is way more to it than this posting board. I thought the images in your poem were very clear and concise, so I too will wait to see more before commenting, enjoy for now, and I shall pick at you later, just kidding! Welcome! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, I don't mean to sound stupid (I never mean to) but was the last line a part of the poem? It seems like it may have fit in, but it's still pretty obvious it wasn't. Altogether, this was a great first post. Hope to see more of you. Welcome to Passions. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Thanks I feel so welcome. I've posted three more tonight over in Teen Poetry #4 because that is what I am... a teenager. |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family!!! Where did you come up with your name? It's great!! Liked your poem and hope to read more from you.  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I enjoyed this....Welcome to Passions! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FozzyOzzy~ Welcome to Passions. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
love your name...coudln't help read your poem...and I loved it...very nice work ...welcome |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Welcome! And "just" a teenager? I think you are doing just great. You paint a pretty picture of snow here and to come. Very nice. Hugs, ME |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions. Being a teen-ager is a full time assignment !! Your poetry is honest. keep writing. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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