Open Poetry #12 |
I'm Not |
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm not the type of woman You’d yearn for through the years But I will stand right at your side And help you face your fears. I’m not a raving beauty You’ll ache for in the night But I will pull you to my heart Cherish and hold you tight. I’m not an inspiration For lovely poetry But I will give you all I have As long as you’ll let me. I’m not a sage with answers, I don’t know why things are But I know there’s no man finer If I searched near and far. I’m not a lucky person - Or so I would have sworn But you have made me thankful For the day I was born. I’m not good enough for you But this I humbly vow I’ll spend forever loving you The best way I know how. I’m not a woman men desire I may not set your soul on fire I know I’m not a great bargain But I’ll love you till my life’s end. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Great, great poem. Maybe selling yourself a bit short? To those who love you, you are all of these things. Loved this so much! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
If someone loves you than you are their everything...they love the woman you are...James |
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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
I like this because by describing the things you are not, you are defining the things you are...which far outweigh the things your not...towards the end it seems to me that you are good enough for him. Jellybean King |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I learned a long time ago ... beauty tis truely only skin deep. Real beauty is found within the heart, held in the promises that you keep. Ive seen the light shining in your words, heard the sincerity of your poetic voice. I know things haven't always been easy ... some roads traveled haven't been by choice. They say what dont break us ... makes us stronger in the end. I believe it also gives us patience ... and compassion that we in turn may lend. They also say beauty is in the eye of those beholding ... and there are those who have eyes that see on thru. But when one looks at another thru the eyes of love ... theres no way they wont see the beauty in you. *winkiewinkie* Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
I don't know you, yet the one that does is very lucky. For beauty is in the eye of beholder. And when a person is beauliful inside, the outside takes care of itself. Just your loving beauty makes you very fine. Bernie Bernie Slicker |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
you know what i think...? i think that the one you love him is very lucky and if he think other wise then you are too good for him . i hope that ever lovers feel the same way you do so the whole would be loving and caring. WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL) EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Suthern~ I've taken self-appointed editorial rights young lady ! ! I am the type of woman You’ll yearn for through the years I will stand right at your side And help you face your fears. I will be the gentle beauty You’ll ache for in the night I will pull you to my heart Cherish and hold you tight. I'll be your inspiration For loving poetry I will give you all I have As long as you will let me. Though I seek to find the answers, I don’t always know why things are But I know there is no man finer For I've searched both near and far. I’m such a lucky person - And I am convinced it's true That you have made me thankful For the day that I met you. I will be more than enough for you And this I humbly vow I’ll spend forever loving you The best way I know how. I’ll be the woman that you desire For I promise to set your soul on fire I want to be your greatest treasure So, I’ll always love you with fullest measure. Now, PRINT IT ! Tape it to the mirror ! And read it everyday ! *Hugs* ~*Marge~* ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ok, what Janet said Suthern, you are awesome........please don't sell yourself short SEA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Suthern--What Janet said so beautifully I feel with my heart...you are a treasure to be cherished...and do what Marge says! |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
I like this Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sorry, my friend, I have to disagree! You ARE all those things - it's shining so bright in your poetry and your replies that you just can't see it!!! Put on your sunglasses!! Wonderful poem. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, my... I never expected responses like this... I couldn't read through them without the old tear ducts kicking in. *S* Y'all are the greatest... thank you so much! JLR: I'm told I do that a little too often... and I'm trying to reform. *G* Thank you so much. JamesMichael: Thank you very much for your kind words. Jellybean King: I like that perspective. *S* I actually described this as a rocking chair poem... back and forth, back and forth... *S* Thank you very much! Janet Marie: What can I say, dear friend? *S* You know it's easier to believe the bad... and hope is a new kid on this block. *S* You and Marge just had to prove me wrong on at least one point, didn't ya? LOL. Thank you so much for the poem... and the generous heart behind it. *S* bslicker: What a wonderful reply!! Thank you so much... I hope you're right! *S* Dreamless: If all lovers woke up feeling "God, I'm so lucky!" and shared that with their partners, there'd certainly be a lot more smiling faces, wouldn't there? *G* Thank you! Marge: You can edit me any day, sweet lady... for I like your version much better! *S* (And of course I LOVE the idea of covering my mirror! *EG*) Thank you! SEA: Awesome?? WOW... Thank you so much! *S* Martie: Yes, ma'am (clicking heels *G*) How could I disobey such loving instructions? *S* Thank you very much... your sweet reply means a lot to me. Moon Dust: Thank you for reading... I'm very glad you liked! *S* PDV: Sunglasses? *G* (puzzled look) I've been in the dark so long, I'm not sure what those are? LOL. Thank you so much, dear lady... I really appreciate those kind words. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh lady, the responses from us to you, and you to us...just prove that 'you are' not the 'you are not' I am humbled by your verse, the beauty in your heart comes out so clearly in your ‘I am not’s’..and lol…..I have seen your smile…don’t you go saying not one thing about your ‘beauty’ lady….I found my bat the other day…and if this weren’t so beautiful, I would be threatening to use it…. I desire to put our friendship in equally as nice verse but don’t think I can kudos to marge and jm...they put down so beautifully what we all see so clearly the weakness in me I fall to my knees unable to proceed and all I am able to say to you is-It’s a bad day for me but, I need say no more and you are there my friend to strengthen the weakness in me your walk too is many times in pain but no one would know you squeeze moments out of hours of work just to send smiles my precious friend you make it easier for me to bear the weakness in me you say your mirror doesn’t show all that you wish that it would but lady I am here to say you couldn’t be more beautiful to me [This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 03-16-2001).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
suthern, I missed this, so glad it got bumped back up.... a terrific write, for a moment, I thought I had...{~,^}... hugs, you remarkable woman! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The poem may say: "I’m not an inspiration For lovely poetry"... but I can see I'm going to have to write "I was wrong" on the blackboard several hundred times in penance. *S* For I can't think of anything lovelier than the verses given me here... I can only say bless you. *S* jellybeans: You dear... being your friend is an honor... and your beautiful poem brings tears... I love you so! And that strengthening stuff and smile sending? That goes both ways! *S* You just g'head and threaten with that bat. *G* It would be worth a few bruises to be close enough to you for you to take a swing or two. *G* Thank you, lady... so very much! Sunshine: Thank you for the kind words and the hugs. *S* Both are appreciated. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, If they can't see the beauty in you, that's their loss. Wonderful write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you, sweet Seymour... your replies are always so kind... and so much appreciated. *S* |
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