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helen smith Member
since 2001-03-12
Posts 240 |
Don't be shy.I don't bite he said. But he lied. He drew blood the first time he touched my heart. He coaxed me to reveal more until I was naked in his hold. My poetry exposed me. Kindly he rearranged my anxiety ,clothing me in promises. |
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thecraig Member
since 2001-03-11
Posts 223 |
The way you mix emotional dred, with fantasy is striking. I am captured. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading your poem...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A very good write! Nice ending! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Clothing me in promises. What a nice line in this poem. A  a day keeps the world 'gBernie Bernie Slicker |
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Waseem Cheema Member
since 2001-03-16
Posts 369Pakistan |
Oh its reality. ""He drew blood the first time he touched my heart"" is wounderful. It is really sexy making some one emotional. [This message has been edited by Waseem Cheema (edited 03-20-2001).] |
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juanrodriguez Member
since 2001-04-17
Posts 66ontario canada |
a really heart felt poem....hope to see see more of these poetry here |
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