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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2001-03-14 05:47 AM

My Moment Complete

as the night enters my world
and the stars begin their shine
my eyes close to my surroundings
and see only your image
a shadow, tall, lingering over me
to polish my night
with a smile, a look reflecting happiness.

as the winds begin to blow
and whistle through these hundred year walls
my ears tune out their howling
and hear only the whispers
coming from the softest of lips
touching my edges in answer
to my hearts thoughts.

as the coolness settles in
and the moons in radiant shine
my senses are overwhelmed, scented vanilla
a candle that flickers,
dances upon your skin
outlining my dreams
of priceless moments of you.

when I see you in a morning's blink
you are my moment complete
a gift of you, in natures wrapping
the last red rose of song,
in silent awe, my eyes watch
as petal by petal you fall unto me
leaving your trail to follow.

and as I reach out, the velvet softness
still holds true, as I gather my moments
piece by piece, living on hope,
treasuring my find,
floating them in my mind's bath
to feel you surround me in warmth
when the nights end becomes my day.

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 03-14-2001).]

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

1 posted 2001-03-14 07:30 AM

Your love, a treat for the senses. I loved it, thanks for sharing!

A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2001-03-14 09:22 AM

I really like the feeling of this wonderful poetic verse!

as the winds begin to blow
and whistle through these hundred year walls
my ears tune out their howling
and hear only the whispers
coming from the softest of lips
touching my edges in answer
to my hearts thoughts.

Wonderful work Wynter!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-14 10:47 AM

A very nice job.

The line "as petal by petal you fall unto me" was greatly creative and gave a very neat image.
~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

DreamLess
Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 92

4 posted 2001-03-14 06:09 PM

I really found your words very touching ..
they are really deep and very wonderful

thanx for sharing

WRITTEN BY ME..(17 YRS HIGHSCHOOL GIRL)
EASY ON ME.. I'M JUST AN AMATEUR

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2001-03-14 09:05 PM

Beautiful dream , living on hope gets hard though. You are strong, and maybe this will be real for you. I hope so.
Sandra

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2001-03-16 09:52 AM

walker
I love your responses... huggzzz

E
thank you..I do live in this 100 year old house and those winds do howl through my thoughts *s

Allan R
thank you for your words of kind

Dreamless
I enjoy your visits, no matter what your age

Sandra
this is more real then hope...just timing is off for now thank you *s

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 03-16-2001).]

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