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Jellybean King Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 153Jelly, Bean |
Small under the cliffs, and Insignificant to the ocean Are the reasons why I walk this shore The ocean steals my footprints Leaving not a trace of me Know that I am part of something larger And my sorrows are one of many Who have passed here before As sand drifts From continent to continent From footprint to footprint From sea to shore In that knowing I am afraid no more Filled with the unspeakable Beauty and strength of this place Coastline hewn from A blacksmith's iron and hammer Yet, fragile as lace You don't hear me As I walk behind you Watching your high arched Footprints glisten, then Melt into foam I turn you As if dancing And your yellow silk scarf Takes flight, like a Japanese kite Barely caught, but not In the pink cradle of your hand [This message has been edited by Jellybean King (edited 03-13-2001).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Small under the cliffs, and Insignificant to the ocean Are the reasons why I walk this shore The ocean steals my footprints Leaving not a trace of me Know that I am part of something larger And my sorrows are one of many Who have passed here before As sand drifts From continent to continent From footprint to footprint From sea to shore =================== oh I love the feel..the essence of this ... and the imagery is wonderfully done.. most unique imagery and comparisons in that cool last verse.. love the last line. very cool poem JBK a perfect last read to take to bed jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
"The ocean steals my footprints Leaving not a trace of me" - That's outstanding. I truly enjoyed this write. You have an individual style to your writing that is beautiful. I shall save this, as I share that love of the ocean and you've painted it beautifully.  After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
OH I love it, I love it!!!!!!!! I'll be back this evening with a more detailed response of just how much. This is great poetry.....look forward to more and I meant that. It's refreshing, original and detailed. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
There are many reasons to admire this poem. The first I found, admittedly, was my surprise at the poetic substance of a composition written by a Jellybean King. Your pseudonym is quite amusing. The poem itself is of grand and delicate things ~ imagery detailing the passage of time, the movement of life's matter, the significance and insignificance of personal philosophy, the beauty in nature, in ourselves, in another. An exploration of observation, with a bit of romance for good measure. Lovely. I am glad to have found it. Thank you. Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love this creative descri[iton......the whole poem is very good! Coastline hewn from A blacksmith's iron and hammer Yet, fragile as lace The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
I am totally caught up in the images....they carry me away to the ocean, and evenings of walks on the beach. Beautiful and light, and I loved reading it!!  Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hah... this was very cute. As everyone said, it had a great feel to it while I read it. ~Allan If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
The ocean steals my footprints Leaving not a trace of me I love this line also *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
This is truly beautiful and uplifting.....I like this very much SEA |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You have Sir, arrived! This is my favorite of yours to date Russ, absolutely beautiful work. As I spend every morning by the ocean and know the feeling it gives and takes - I do know you captured this as if you had a poetic poloroid, so kudos to you my friend, well done! ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
"The ocean steals my footprints leaving not a trace of me Know that I am part of something larger and my sorrows are one of many who have passed here before as sand drifts from continent to continent from footprint to footprint from sea to shore" ================================ Wow! Beautiful and inspiring laced with a touch of darkness. ~Applause~ Take care, Melissa~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
JK...I loved the way you move from the granduer and beauty of nature and the ocean..to the relative insignificance of one person in time...and the personal human touch at the end, just perfect. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a delight this was to read! *S* I loved the ponderings, the peacefulness... and the voyeurism. *G* This is great! |
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