I Stand Upon the Mountain ( a song of hope)

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Poet deVine

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0 posted 2001-03-12 11:47 PM

I stand upon the mountain
raise my voice for all to hear
I’m in love with a wonderful man
who doesn’t know I’m here

I sing a song of lonely repine
sadness mixed with hope
and watch to see if my beloved
dares climb this rocky slope

With a melody and chorus chant
in soprano voice I sing my plea
that if he hears this singer’s voice
he will climb to me.

Honeybee
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1 posted 2001-03-12 11:55 PM

Well expressed with wonderful flow, Sharon! It seems that I too, have been standing upon that same mountain calling for "the one" to climb to me, but, me thinks that I'm just slipping off

It's good to see that you are filled with hope, never lose that! *and Melissa crosses her fingers, I hope he hears your plea soon*

Take care,
Melissa~

Katherine Chandler
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2 posted 2001-03-12 11:56 PM

I hear the guitar strumming and a voice just as clear as if it were an angel singing. I just loved this positive, hope-filled poem. Thank you for sharing this today.

Kate

Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.
T S Eliot

Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2001-03-12 11:58 PM

Sharon,

I hope he hears!!! You deserve it!!!

LW

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2001-03-13 12:02 PM

Methinks it's a nite of witchcraft...and don't ask...today? I got more boots than John Wayne...

this? sharon...IS spellbinding!

Poet deVine

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5 posted 2001-03-13 12:10 PM

Thank you ladies...I tried to 'sing' it as I wrote it....

and if you could teach me some witches spell
I'd make him like me very well
but if I did, I would surely dwell
in the depths of poetic hell!

Krawdad
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6 posted 2001-03-13 01:00 AM

Poet de'

Sing it loud and sing it clear
surely he must be of ear
Hope for this beloved a man
soon be up the mountain ran.

Kraw'

Mysteria

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7 posted 2001-03-13 05:42 AM

Yoodaladyeoooo! Try yodelling, that will get his attention if nothing else, he he! Nice job on this.

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2001-03-13 05:47 AM

OMIGOD...LOL...sorry sharon, but that yodeling from Mysteria? WAS FUNNY....
had to come back just to giggle!

and of course, compliment you again...

methinks you have passed Incantations 101...

Martha Cowan
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9 posted 2001-03-13 07:13 AM

How could his heart not hear such a beautiful and charming song? This took my breath away, thank you!
Smiles to you, and my wishes that your day is fantabulous!
Martha

Marge Tindal

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10 posted 2001-03-13 07:14 AM

PoetdeVine~
Well ... it has a melancholy melodic flavor~
I think it'll do quite nicely.

I also thought of yodeling and of Heidi !
Now 'heidi' yourself down off that mountain
and make the pursuit easier !
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Poet deVine

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11 posted 2001-03-13 07:55 AM

Thank you all again for the kind words.

And Marge, if it was easy, then I wouldn't want him..does that make sense??? I don't want a man that comes when I snap my fingers. I want a man who will climb that mountain (emotionally speaking) and build a camp in my heart..........

Irish Rose
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12 posted 2001-03-13 09:46 AM

I don't blame you, it may not be easy but remember something....

a woman deserves the best, don't stand in line for anybody!!!!

only at the grocery store, and event then....it's not always worth it!

Loved this.

Kathleen Blake

"When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass,
and the sun drips honey."
Laurie Lee

WhtDove
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13 posted 2001-03-13 10:05 AM

(raising eyebrows) lol
Your flow was great, your message tender and romantic, and longing. I love this piece!

(as well as your comments)...put that one into a poem as well!!

"I want a man who will climb that mountain and build a camp in my heart.........."

Nate Dogg
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14 posted 2001-03-13 10:40 AM

I loved the imagery in this poem...wonderful write!

Nathan

Elizabeth

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15 posted 2001-03-13 11:37 AM

If I sing with you....maybe mine will come to me as well...

suthern

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16 posted 2001-03-13 03:02 PM

I love this, PDV... and hope he's sneaking up the other side to surprise you. *S* And I'm with WhtDove... your response is the start of another poem. *S*

Poet deVine

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17 posted 2001-03-13 06:59 PM

I've decided to take yodeling lessons!!!

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