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I Stand Upon the Mountain ( a song of hope)
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I Stand Upon the Mountain ( a song of hope) |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I stand upon the mountain raise my voice for all to hear I’m in love with a wonderful man who doesn’t know I’m here I sing a song of lonely repine sadness mixed with hope and watch to see if my beloved dares climb this rocky slope With a melody and chorus chant in soprano voice I sing my plea that if he hears this singer’s voice he will climb to me. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Well expressed with wonderful flow, Sharon! It seems that I too, have been standing upon that same mountain calling for "the one" to climb to me, but, me thinks that I'm just slipping off  It's good to see that you are filled with hope, never lose that! *and Melissa crosses her fingers, I hope he hears your plea soon*  Take care, Melissa~ |
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Katherine Chandler Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 280Florida, USA |
I hear the guitar strumming and a voice just as clear as if it were an angel singing. I just loved this positive, hope-filled poem. Thank you for sharing this today.  Kate Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood. T S Eliot |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sharon, I hope he hears!!! You deserve it!!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Methinks it's a nite of witchcraft...and don't ask...today? I got more boots than John Wayne... this? sharon...IS spellbinding! |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you ladies...I tried to 'sing' it as I wrote it.... and if you could teach me some witches spell I'd make him like me very well but if I did, I would surely dwell in the depths of poetic hell! |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Poet de' Sing it loud and sing it clear surely he must be of ear Hope for this beloved a man soon be up the mountain ran. Kraw' |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yoodaladyeoooo! Try yodelling, that will get his attention if nothing else, he he! Nice job on this. ~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
OMIGOD...LOL...sorry sharon, but that yodeling from Mysteria? WAS FUNNY.... had to come back just to giggle! and of course, compliment you again... methinks you have passed Incantations 101...  |
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Martha Cowan Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 240Groves, Texas |
How could his heart not hear such a beautiful and charming song? This took my breath away, thank you! Smiles to you, and my wishes that your day is fantabulous! Martha |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ Well ... it has a melancholy melodic flavor~ I think it'll do quite nicely. I also thought of yodeling and of Heidi ! Now 'heidi' yourself down off that mountain and make the pursuit easier !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all again for the kind words. And Marge, if it was easy, then I wouldn't want him..does that make sense??? I don't want a man that comes when I snap my fingers. I want a man who will climb that mountain (emotionally speaking) and build a camp in my heart.......... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I don't blame you, it may not be easy but remember something.... a woman deserves the best, don't stand in line for anybody!!!! only at the grocery store, and event then....it's not always worth it! Loved this. Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
(raising eyebrows) lol Your flow was great, your message tender and romantic, and longing. I love this piece! (as well as your comments)...put that one into a poem as well!! "I want a man who will climb that mountain and build a camp in my heart.........." |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
I loved the imagery in this poem...wonderful write! Nathan |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
If I sing with you....maybe mine will come to me as well... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I love this, PDV... and hope he's sneaking up the other side to surprise you. *S* And I'm with WhtDove... your response is the start of another poem. *S* |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I've decided to take yodeling lessons!!! |
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