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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
LornSongShine, of the simplest silver Cold, through the howl of the night Plain, passed unseen among mystic Dull, nigh to glorious bright Trickle, attempting a river River, admiring the sea Sea, swelling fullest for moonlight Moon, hear the howling of me Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Claire...this is awesome....I know how this is... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my but I loved this one! There is a full moon tonight, and it seems to brings out the muse well. I thoroughly enjoyed this, thank you. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
was out for my evening stroll, and the light of the full moon bathed me in it's glow... now the light of a poet has also bathed me in her glow... |
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ATelamon Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 328Purgatory, Last Staircase, Up |
Your second stanza in particular is quite nice. Elegant use of language. My compliments. AT "Beginning is one place, I've been before." J. Anderson |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Claire.....magnificent..... |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Ooooh, now you know I just love the moon.  Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Claire. You have a way of expressing the very depths of your soul that always touches me deeply. Very well written, as always! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
beautifully longing Claire. . . excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Very nice Clair. A couple of interpretations are running through my mind. Parker |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Oh my ! This is as exquisite as the glow of the moon. I LOVE what you do. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I get a picture of a retired watch-dog chained to nowhere ... wishing for something ... anything ... I'm sure it reads a little different to each that reads it Very nice Claire |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Simply Great! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Claire , The word elegant comes to mind . Thanks . Doc |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Curious - I watched "Moonstruck" again last night - and - as you know had earlier posted a Moonlight poem - seems we're both struck - I truly loved this |
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The_Rose Junior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 10 |
To Meadowmuse, Each desires to increase The worth they feel to be, Their lesser state to cease, And from gloom to feel free. Does howling work for you, And lorness not renew. Thy loneliness words state, Yet love must expiate Thy howling, thy heart mend, And thy lorn song to end. The Rose [email protected] Your concise imagery, contrasting word metaphors, all of which appealed to me, is quite different from your work displayed on your home page. Nonetheless, as much enjoyed. |
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Packratmike Senior Member
since 2001-02-25
Posts 632California, USA |
Excellent.....concise yet full of imagery. Reads better everytime I read it. Mike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you all for reading this piece. Glad to know it was enjoyed by such kind folks. I guess we all feel alone upon occasion. Who better to tell it to than the moon? Elizabeth, thank you for the "awesome" Mysteria, yes the moon certainly has a way of pulling forth feelings, words and awareness. Thank you very much for reading. Mike, I read about your lovely evening stroll. I was especially taken by your "first breath of twilight on lush land below" line. Now THAT, my friend, is poetry. (o: ATelamon, my sincere thanks to you for reading. Very glad you enjoyed my poem. Sunshine, thank you for your "magnificent" response. (o: Moon Dust, I could have guessed you enjoyed moon poetry. Thank you very much! Denise, your responses are always so kind. I'm glad you found this poem touching. I was a little "touched" when I wrote it, I believe. (lol) Thanks dear. (o: Sven, thank you, my friend, for reading... and for understanding. Parker, thank you. I am curious about your interpretations. (o: Marge, my thanks, as always, for your warm response. I'm glad you enjoyed. Rex, what a fascinating interpretation. I love hearing how poems are perceived by different people, and can see how this one might cause you to visualize the longing dog. (though I am prettier) lol Voiceless, I hear you loud and clear. Thank you! Doc, and the word "gracious" comes to mine. Thank you for your gracious response. Wilfred, struck? Indeed I believe we are. Thank you very much for letting me know you enjoyed this. I love your Moonlight poem. The Rose, thank you for such a lovely poem, and welcome to Passions. I am looking toward reading more of your work soon. Packratmike, my sincere thanks to you for reading and finding something to enjoy in my poem. Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 03-11-2001).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Claire, Never know what you're going to come up with And this time a song to the moon. A very enchanting verse Superbly written LIz |
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Just A Woman Senior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 507 |
You are extremely talented. I can tell simpily by this poem. I'm in awe!After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
"Oh Yah" |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Excellent! |
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