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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2001-03-09 11:09 PM



LornSong


Shine, of the simplest silver
Cold, through the howl of the night
Plain, passed unseen among mystic
Dull, nigh to glorious bright

Trickle, attempting a river
River, admiring the sea
Sea, swelling fullest for moonlight
Moon, hear the howling of me




Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2001-03-09 11:14 PM


Claire...this is awesome....I know how this is...
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2 posted 2001-03-09 11:34 PM


Oh my but I loved this one! There is a full moon tonight, and it seems to brings out the muse well. I thoroughly enjoyed this, thank you.
Mike
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3 posted 2001-03-10 12:29 PM


was out for my evening stroll, and the light of the full moon bathed me in it's glow...
now the light of a poet has also bathed me in her glow...

ATelamon
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4 posted 2001-03-10 02:05 AM


Your second stanza in particular is quite nice. Elegant use of language.

My compliments.

AT


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5 posted 2001-03-10 06:01 AM


Claire.....magnificent.....

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6 posted 2001-03-10 10:05 AM


Ooooh, now you know I just love the moon.

Don't ever give in, if you do you've lost everything you've ever had and everything you hope to gain, but if you carry on your already winning.


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7 posted 2001-03-10 11:27 AM


Excellent expression, Claire. You have a way of expressing the very depths of your soul that always touches me deeply. Very well written, as always!
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8 posted 2001-03-10 11:44 AM


beautifully longing Claire. . . excellent. . .

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9 posted 2001-03-10 12:49 PM


Very nice Clair. A couple of interpretations are running through my mind.

Parker

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10 posted 2001-03-10 12:51 PM


Claire~
Oh my !
This is as exquisite as the glow of the moon.
I LOVE what you do.
~*Marge*~


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Rex Allen McCoy
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11 posted 2001-03-10 01:55 PM


I get a picture of a retired watch-dog
chained to nowhere ... wishing for something ... anything ...
I'm sure it reads a little different to each that reads it
Very nice Claire

Voiceless
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12 posted 2001-03-10 02:04 PM


Simply Great!


~*Peachy Be*~

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13 posted 2001-03-10 02:41 PM


Claire ,
The word elegant comes to mind . Thanks .
Doc

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14 posted 2001-03-10 03:10 PM


Curious - I watched "Moonstruck" again last night - and - as you know had earlier posted a Moonlight poem - seems we're both struck - I truly loved this
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15 posted 2001-03-11 12:19 PM


To Meadowmuse,

Each desires to increase
The worth they feel to be,
Their lesser state to cease,
And from gloom to feel free.
Does howling work for you,
And lorness not renew.
Thy loneliness words state,
Yet love must expiate
Thy howling, thy heart mend,
And thy lorn song to end.

The Rose
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Your concise imagery,
contrasting word metaphors,
all of which appealed to me,
is quite different from your
work displayed on your home page.
Nonetheless, as much enjoyed.



Packratmike
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16 posted 2001-03-11 03:27 AM


Excellent.....concise yet full of imagery. Reads better everytime I read it.

Mike

Meadowmuse
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17 posted 2001-03-11 11:54 AM


Thank you all for reading this piece. Glad to know it was enjoyed by such kind folks. I guess we all feel alone upon occasion. Who better to tell it to than the moon?

Elizabeth, thank you for the "awesome"

Mysteria, yes the moon certainly has a way of pulling forth feelings, words and awareness. Thank you very much for reading.

Mike, I read about your lovely evening stroll. I was especially taken by your "first breath of twilight on lush land below" line. Now THAT, my friend, is poetry. (o:

ATelamon, my sincere thanks to you for reading. Very glad you enjoyed my poem.

Sunshine, thank you for your "magnificent" response. (o:

Moon Dust, I could have guessed you enjoyed moon poetry. Thank you very much!

Denise, your responses are always so kind. I'm glad you found this poem touching. I was a little "touched" when I wrote it, I believe. (lol) Thanks dear. (o:

Sven, thank you, my friend, for reading... and for understanding.

Parker, thank you. I am curious about your interpretations. (o:

Marge, my thanks, as always, for your warm response. I'm glad you enjoyed.

Rex, what a fascinating interpretation. I love hearing how poems are perceived by different people, and can see how this one might cause you to visualize the longing dog. (though I am prettier) lol

Voiceless, I hear you loud and clear. Thank you!

Doc, and the word "gracious" comes to mine. Thank you for your gracious response.

Wilfred, struck? Indeed I believe we are. Thank you very much for letting me know you enjoyed this. I love your Moonlight poem.

The Rose, thank you for such a lovely poem, and welcome to Passions. I am looking toward reading more of your work soon.

Packratmike, my sincere thanks to you for reading and finding something to enjoy in my poem.




Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



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Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 2001-03-11 06:16 PM


Claire,
Never know what you're going to come up with
And this time a song to the moon.
A very enchanting verse
Superbly written
LIz

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19 posted 2001-03-11 06:30 PM


You are extremely talented. I can tell simpily by this poem. I'm in awe!

After years of searching, I have found I am nothing more, nothing less...I am in truth Just A Woman after all.

Rex Allen McCoy
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20 posted 2001-03-11 07:38 PM


"Oh Yah"

Krawdad
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21 posted 2001-03-11 07:55 PM


Excellent!
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