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Open Poetry #12

To The World

Allstaria22
Member

since 2000-06-11

Posts 83
MN USA

0 posted 2001-03-08 09:31 PM

Once there was an image i held in my mind
of everything I wanted me to be
it was a little blurred at the edges
with some gaps here and there
so I filled the questions in with
what it seemed the world would want
but like a virus the world's image spread
slowly eating peice by peice
the image I had for myself
when finally there was nothing left
of my hopes or my dreams
only what the world wanted
from one little peice the whole
was destroyed.

Isaiah 1:18

"Everybody loves a rose, will you be thankful for the thorns?" -All Together Seperate

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2001-03-09 02:42 PM

You've written well of the dangers of trying to be someone you're not, trying to please someone else and losing you in the process. *S* Good job!

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

2 posted 2001-03-10 11:34 PM

Hi Allstaria,

I have to agree with Suthern 100% on this one, but you are not the only one believe me! I have spent most of my life doing just that thing but you can find your way to understanding "you" and gain back what you lost, and you did a awesome job on getting your thoughts out in to your poem in fact I would like to put it in my library, thank you so much,

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Just A Woman
Senior Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 507

3 posted 2001-03-10 11:40 PM

I can relate to this, so very much, but could never have written it so clearly and deeply as you did. I compliment you!

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

4 posted 2001-03-10 11:41 PM

I like what you say. I like how you say it.

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