Open Poetry #12 |
To her Morning, come.... |
Sunshine
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To her morning, come…. She looks to you Overlooks the rest Should her dream come true She shall be blessed But if you are now not the one Than do not be there, come the sun Do not lead her love astray Do not promise that you’ll stay For she is one of liquid rhyme One who has a sense of chime One for whom true love rings That which only a true love brings So to you, I offer simple words Lest you think her love, unheard, If your spirit should fall in the night She shall still arise in the morning, bright But if you believe she is the one Then please, to her morning, come |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
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Karilea...I love this...simple but beautiful and graceful sincerity...sigh. Lovely. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Serenity...thanks go to Doreen for letting me borrow the idea.... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"But if you believe she is the one then please to her morning come." I have felt this a few times...and have hoped that my morning would be full of sunshine....James |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Beautiful. "Do not lead her love astray Do not promise her you'll stay" I love what you've done with this. Excellent, Sunshine. To hold tomorrow we must first be willing to let go of yesterday. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
nice job, karilea.... your writing is prolific.... and it rhymes, too! i'm happy one of my poems could inspire you... [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 03-08-2001).] |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Sunshine,this is such a good advice,IF HE'S GOING TO HURT HER FEELINGS, JUST GET THE HECK OUT! Sorry I got carried away, Poetry at its best, well done! [This message has been edited by walker (edited 03-08-2001).] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea..."to her morning, come" What a wonderful sound you have made with your words! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For she is one of liquid rhyme One who has a sense of chime One for whom true love rings That which only a true love brings So to you, I offer simple words Lest you think her love, unheard, If your spirit should fall in the night She shall still arise in the morning, bright But if you believe she is the one Then please, to her morning, come =================== oh my oh my... I do so love when you are inspired ... this is so way cool... the vocab and language..the rhyme ... but the emotions essence is the soul of this gem ... "So to you, I offer simple words Lest you think her love, unheard, If your spirit should fall in the night She shall still arise in the morning, bright" IWIHWT!!!!!! Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"She shall still arise in the morning, bright" Yes she will - regardless - and no poet is more deserving of a worthy true love This is a treasure poem for sure |
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