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Once Upon A Dreaming
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Once Upon A Dreaming |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Once upon a dreaming I saw you sitting there Gazing out over the restless water A sad smile upon your lips. Once upon a dreaming I heard your hearts soft sigh And I longed to take the pain away To chase the sadness from your eyes. Once upon a dreaming I reached out to touch your face To turn your eyes upon me Hoping you could see all I am. Once upon a dreaming I offered you my love But you turned your back on this future Holding tight to your past. Once upon a dreaming I lost myself in you Now I gaze out over the restless water A sad smile upon my lips. |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
I can tell right now, this baby's gonna get some replies, and rightfully so, since this is splendid |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paula~ Just a wonderful read !  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula interesting how you use the phrase a sad smile...James |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I can see that sad smile...sometimes too often in a mirror, myself..nice poem, Paula ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
ah, shades of Poe, I love it!!!!!! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula dear heart, I love this one I truly do fabulous dear heart, utterly fabulous. I really lov ethe way this one feels you know! Love you sister mine  because you are truly beautiful in heart and spirit. And of course gorgeous to look at, I ought to be jealous I suppose love, for you have style, grace and beauty, combined with an awesome talent. But I'm not because you are far to precious to be jealous of. Take care love and warm stuff Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
You've captured how some people are so unable to let go of yesterday, to reach tomorrow just beautifully. I compliment you Paula! "Some people see the cup as half empty. Some people see the cup as half full. I see the cup as too large." ~George Carlin~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Paula, Saddly beautiful and I love the flow of this poem very nicely done, enjoyed much thank you, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Once upon a dreaming I saw you sitting there Gazing out over the restless water A sad smile upon your lips. Once upon a dreaming I heard your hearts soft sigh And I longed to take the pain away To chase the sadness from your eyes. =============== you know that I know that you know...(yes you know) beautiful bittersweet turn of phrase Paula well done girlie girl ... heres to smiles and happy endings for us all take care jm Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Eagle...thank you for the wonderful compliment Marge...it is always a pleasure and an homour to have you read my work...thank you James...I thought you might like that one...hugs Wynter...hugs to you for your sad smiles...but thats part of the chance we take when we give our heart away...thank you Kathleen...ah girl...you flatter me so...Poe indeed! Thank you so much Sweet sis...jealous? Of me? Heaven forbid...you are the beauty, heart and soul...Love you dreamkeeper...letting go is difficult...some people never do learn...thank you Cerenity...I'm glad you enjoyed it...thanks Janet...hear hear...I second that...thanks girlie I appreciate that you read this... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful poem about the cycle of life and love ...I know the feeling you're writing about here...and the writing is so good!...those restless waters seem to consume the thoughts sometimes........love to ya ethome The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
How'd I miss this? So sad, so true...so well spoken. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...sweet poet...thank you for your wonderful words JLR...lol its very easy to miss poems now...but I'm glad you found me...thanks |
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