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Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

0 posted 2001-03-07 09:22 PM

Her Door

Her door is always open,
For some friend that might stop by;
But her steps are always covered,
With the leaves dropped from the sky.

She wants to fly to heaven,
Each night she goes to bed;
But dreams of dying scare her,
So she stays in hell instead.

Heaven must be a nice place,
For those who cannot stay;
On this speck of dust in the universe,
At least that's what they say.

The sun shines through her window,
Just like the day before;
But she won't be getting up today,
She won't open up her door.

No, she won't be getting up today,
This thought runs through her head;
She's finally found a true love,
Who will help her muss her bed.

"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2001-03-07 09:34 PM

Mike,

I just loved the ending here!! I didn't see it coming and that was definitely the best part!! Nice job!!

Lone Wolf

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

2 posted 2001-03-08 12:52 PM

What a wonderful reason to stay in bed...liked this a lot

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

3 posted 2001-03-08 12:47 PM

I agree...sigh...i live the first part...now I just need to find a love and 'live' the ending...this was wonderful

JLR
Senior Member

since 2001-02-04

Posts 1785

4 posted 2001-03-08 01:17 PM

Now that was a great ending!

Celeste
Senior Member

since 2000-11-11

Posts 597

5 posted 2001-03-08 02:29 PM

I shall echo the others.......I loved the ending. An excellent write! I applaud!

To hold tomorrow we must first be willing to let go of yesterday.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2001-03-08 03:32 PM

I love this... and can't think of a better reason for not getting out of bed! LOL

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

7 posted 2001-03-09 01:48 AM

You all have my permission to stay in bed tomorrow.........thank you.

"HEY, DON'T THROW THAT AWAY, I MIGHT NEED IT SOMEDAY!!!" Packratmike

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