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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-03-07 05:46 AM

Shuffle step,
Across the dingy once white,
Wind blow passed,
Rolling trash,
Limps into another night;
Shuffle step.

Ruckus walk,
White powder and dark brown beer,
Almost men
Yet just boys,
Repeat offenders to fear,
More than noise,
Yet not men,
There are none whom can now steer
More than talk.

Shuffling into coming noise,
Unknowing,
Stops surrounded by the boys,
Red and darkness overcomes,
They’re pounding,
As if his body were drums,
Then crumpled upon the ground
They’re kicking,
Off they go with laughter’s sound.

Eyes find light,
And waves of pain turns to bliss,
Room of white,
Dress of white,
An angel where eyes can’t miss
Pleasant slight
All in white,
This must be death’s final kiss,
No more night,
No more fight,
The softest end he could wish,
Gone the light.
The nurse gives his brow a kiss.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2001-03-07 07:18 AM

was nice of that nurse..wasn't it...a kiss on the brow, how I like that thought, sad but a part of life as are all your telling poems..

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Mother_Earth
Senior Member

since 2000-11-20

Posts 1370
1/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan

2 posted 2001-03-08 01:53 PM

Professor it is an act of kindness from the nurse, but oh, if the white powder and beer had not come before to cause other young to think they could get away with murder, maybe it wouldn't have been necessary. Maybe, maybe, maybe...... You make us think.
Hugs, ME

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-03-08 02:47 PM

I am new here but wanted to tell you how very much I enjoyed that poem. Your visuals were excellent, and captured the mood perfectly, job well done.

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

Meadowmuse
Member Elite

since 1999-12-27

Posts 3263

4 posted 2001-03-10 01:36 AM

Gloom, strong writing. Spare, tight and potent. Excellent treatment of a difficult and sobering subject. Thanks for it.

Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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