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Embers_Before_God
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since 2001-03-06

Posts 101
USA

0 posted 2001-03-06 10:40 PM

Alas,
the sun
is but a pause
between darkness,
when time slips
through our minds,
amidst angels
and nightmares,
where thick fogs
veil the moon
and victims swoon,
carried away,
far away,
on cool nighttime breezes,
to a safer place,
a better place.
And when the sun returns,
each morn,
as it should,
the pain eases,
though the memories retained
still stain
and linger
amongst the shelves
of our minds
like rust
on old, ancient hinges.

[This message has been edited by Embers_Before_God (edited 03-06-2001).]

Mike
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since 1999-06-19

Posts 2462

1 posted 2001-03-06 11:20 PM

enjoyed the read... nicely written.

Packratmike
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since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

2 posted 2001-03-06 11:54 PM

though the memories retained
still stain
and linger
amongst the shelves
of our minds
like rust
on old, ancient hinges.

I like that.....Bravo, EBG, Bravo!!!

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-03-07 10:30 PM

Embers,

The rust and the memories will always remain. And really, I wouldn't trade the good memories for anything. Nice writing.

LW

Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Poeminister
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since 2000-02-26

Posts 1862
Regina SK; Canada

4 posted 2001-03-07 10:41 PM

Embers--Wonderfully expressed. Enjoyed the read.

PM

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2001-03-08 12:21 PM

loved the flow and the imagery---Welcome to passions, m'friend. Looking forward to more!

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

6 posted 2001-03-09 09:27 AM

Hi Embers,

Magnificent I love this one, I am a fan of the combination of both nature and humans in poetry, I feel nature brings out some awesome thoughts and this poem is absolutely wonderful, enjoyed much thank you.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

7 posted 2001-03-11 04:04 PM

The memories always remain, the trick is to oil the hinges with love! This was an excellent piece of poetry.

~*~A poet is someone who reads more than they write ~*~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2001-03-11 04:23 PM

Welcome to Passions. This is a very good write. It's all too true how our memories remain stained forever over certain things that happen throughout a lifetime..... have a nice day!

The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges.

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2001-03-11 04:49 PM

Embers~
I like the references here.
Get the feeling that there are a lot of rusty hinges that could stand a little 'oiling'.
Wonderful render.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

10 posted 2001-03-11 06:11 PM

Amazing how the fog remains and the sun helps to create the rust in the early morning mist....

a remarkable read....

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