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| Open Poetry #12 |
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Phantom Winds |
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Embers_Before_God Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 101USA |
Angels suffering with Heaven’s plight, Through phantom winds that blow strong at night, Bruising wings while in mid-flight, Delivering God’s souls still new. Their hearts still beat, through and through, Not left behind for winds that blew, But escorted in, by faith so true, A bond so tight, it must be so. Within those winds that always blow Those angel’s wings to and fro, A peace so placid, we could not know Without looking into God’s eye. For on this Earth, our eyes just cry, Tears blowing in winds across our sky, Unlike the ones where angel’s fly Holding our souls, one and all, Until it’s time for us to call The winds that prevent our sudden fall And guide us toward heaven, standing tall, And those angels that lead us into the light. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Embers, WELCOME to Passions! You're going to like it here, and I have a feeling that if this is the gist of your works to come, we are going to enjoy you as well! Check your e-mail for a special message! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very nice intro, Embers! The form is unique to me and easy to read though likely not that easy to do. I'm thinking that the last stanza is to go back to the rhyme of the 1st stanza in its last line, right? Welcome!!! Bienvenidos! |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Embers, you have written a beautiful poem to share with us. My angels are getting on in years, but after they read this, they will perk up. Welcome and hugs, ME |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
i thoroughly enjoyed your rhyme scheme, here, Ember, welcome! Kathleen Blake "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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Embers_Before_God Member
since 2001-03-06
Posts 101USA |
Thank you all for the "welcomes". It looks nice and warm, comforting. Thanks for the email, Sunshine. Thank you, Kathleen, Mother_Earth and VAS. I'm racking my brain, trying to recall a familiar poem title with this scheme for you VAS, but my mind is drawing blanks. You are right that the last line rhymes with the first. I'm not sure if there is a limit to the number of stanzas as long as the last goes back to the first. Perhaps someone with greater knowledge than I possess can help. aaab bbbc cccd ddde eeea --Embers |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For on this Earth, our eyes just cry, Tears blowing in winds across our sky, Unlike the ones where angel’s fly Holding our souls, one and all, Until it’s time for us to call The winds that prevent our sudden fall And guide us toward heaven, standing tall, And those angels that lead us into the light. ======================== what an impressive piece of writing .. the cadence is perfect ... and the rhyme scheme is very clever and cool as is the imagery. Welcome to Passions from me as well Embers. so nice to meet you... I look forward to more of your lovely work. take care jm Some find subtlety in strangers some find subtlety alone Your eyes,you see everything my eyes,I see its all together now and I know. ~candlebox~ |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
What a wonderful way to enter Passions! I must say "welcome" and that this is a fantastic read. I love the rhyme sequence you have here. Flows so nicely.  With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
What a wonderful poem you've shared with us... I look forward to reading more! *S* Welcome to Passions! |
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angelface Junior Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 40Savannah area, Georgia |
This is a beautiful poem, dear, and I love how you rhymed it! I've never seen anything like that, and I admire you for it.  af I'd rather fail trying to do something spectacular than fail being conservative Ben Affleck |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Embers, Excellent imagery here. So peaceful and serene in the flow and rhyme. Very nice writing for your first post here. Welcome to the Passions family!! Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
It flows beautifully! And is a pleasure to read! ~*Peachy Be*~ |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
"And guide us toward heaven, standing tall, And those angels that lead us into the light." My heart becomes euphoric just thinking of the truth in this wonderful piece. My compliments to you. "Death marks the beginning, not the end. It is our journey to God." --Billy Graham |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family, I certainly look forward to reading more from you after this gem!  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Embers, Welcome to Passions, wonderful imagery in this beauty, hope you enjoy your stay here, Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Applause! This is spectacular!! We have a Spiritual Forum as well, I know they'd love to read some of your work too. I hope you'll join us in there as well. /pip/Forum25/HTML/001948.html If I haven't done so already, or if I have, once again, WELCOME! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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