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“Not Tonight”
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“Not Tonight” |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England 
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The candles flicker softly, and the fragrance of rare blossoms fill the air... The fireplace crackles gently... A reminder that warm nights are not quite there... She lies upon the big four-poster, waiting for your hand upon the door... Her body aches with need, her heart is beating, faster than it’s done before... She’s draped in sheerest silk, of purple hues to match her longing and desire... And in her deep green eyes, a light reflection of her flame, or of the fire? Her hair in chestnut strands are flowing freely, past her shoulders to her waist... She sighs as she anticipates your mouth, your love, and how your body tastes... She lies with eyes upon the door, while dreaming of the love as yet to make... And all the pleasures life can give are there upon the threshold, free to take... Her supple body quivers at the thought of gentle kisses on her lips, which spread apart remembering all the love she’s taken from your fingertips... Her passion mounts, and now she knows, that she can’t lie in wait for you much longer... There’s footsteps in the hall, coming her way, and now they’re getting so much stronger... When finally the doorknob turns, and in her eyes, her man of dreams appears... And just the sight of you ignites the fire, even after all these years! You drop your workday burdens on the chair, and stoop to kiss her cheek hello... The atmosphere she nourished, seems invisible, you don’t see, or want to know... You climb in bed, roll over, you don’t see the tears as she blows out the lights, the last thing that you tell her is just “No, I have a headache...not tonight!” Live...Love...Be grateful for both!! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, headache reliever is sold for both male and female.... almost too warm for this room! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sunny - you romantic you, and with a headache even! Many feelings there Sunny, in this writing that I see. Nicely done. BC |
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Taffetta Junior Member
since 2001-02-26
Posts 27 |
Sunny As you blew out the lights, your heart was broken in two. Your words of pain and disappointment are written in every phrase. Nicely done. Taffetta |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, have I been here, so recently, waiting, waiting, so much love and longing and then "poof", not there, feelings changed..Wow, you so well described that longing, I could feel it again myself. Great write my friend. S |
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JLR Senior Member
since 2001-02-04
Posts 1785 |
Now that was a shame...but you told it so well. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Oh you tricky little deviless you....you sucked me right in right down to the finish....I loved it!! The poet is like a cocoon; in him the caterpillar of the past finds rest, and from him the butterfly of the future emerges. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sunnyone, loved the twist on the ending. Well done. *s* Enjoy life...this is NOT a dress rehearsal. *s* |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Excellent descriptiveness through this.....and unfortionately so very true in life. Nice one, Sunnyone! "One out of four people in this country is mentally imbalanced. Think of your three closest friends - and if they seem okay, then you're the one." |
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Brian Beaudry Member
since 2001-03-03
Posts 57Northern Ontario Canada |
The imagery painted in this poem is very vivid if not a little scorching!!!The pain in the ending felt by all who read and feel.It reminds me of one I wrote called "Romantic Evening" Great writing Sunny!! Brian |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hi me twin...such a downright painful twist...hugs darlin |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You've written the journey from anticipation to dejection very well! *S* |
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