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jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

0 posted 2001-03-02 10:34 AM

this was inspired...or should I say brought to life by Packratmike's "yellow roses"...sigh...some memories are sad

One half time

The words I read strung into my heart
and hooked a memory
tugged
and tugged until I finally let it go
and let it pull me back into you

I had traveled my life in one half time
for so long that I got used to the gait
telling myself that this must be
the way its supposed to be
I took one look in your eyes
and knew I had been telling myself lies

Not much time were we allowed, but
I was lucky that there was that once
when I sat before you
my beating heart, my breaths in and out
all of me, adored
I opened my world
for your admiration
as much as I wanted to please your eyes
it was all I could do to keep a
viewing distance
In heaven you said you must be
and you opened your arms wide
We crossed time and into your lap I melted
with the touch of your lips
I liquefied
Part of me slipped into a part of you
never to leave
A perfect match, we were
meshed
we were in sync
The world was right
days slipped easy
oiled with smiles and laughter
until you had to leave
And now I try alone
some days you are my comfort
some nights you are my dream
when it hurts too much to go on
you are my Novocain

The words I read hooked a memory
and pulled me back
into the comfort of you
and I wrap myself in the numb
one half time
will never be enough
again

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 03-02-2001).]

Lady In White

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since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

1 posted 2001-03-02 10:42 AM

words read, a scent on the air, a shard of laughter breaking the barriers...

all tugging...

well done!

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

2 posted 2001-03-02 10:45 AM

"YEPPERS"........and it IS my word, LOL but I am willing to share it with ya. As I was saying.....yeppers, this is one smooth piece of penning done by you with a flow that sort of wraps you up and hugs you tighter with every word. Wonderfully penned with so much vivid emotion in it. I especially like the way your line breaks lend an ease of reading that allows a close interpretation of your words. Well done sybil. Now you may go out and play with a smile and a light heart. You have earned it in this wonderful piece.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-03-02 10:45 AM

I had traveled my life in one half time
for so long that I got used to the gait
telling myself that this must be
the way its supposed to be
I took one look in your eyes
and knew I had been telling myself lies

Not much time were we allowed, but
I was lucky that there was that once
when I sat before you
my beating heart, my breaths in and out
all of me, adored
I opened my world
for your admiration
as much as I wanted to please your eyes
it was all I could do to keep a
viewing distance
In heaven you said you must be
and you opened your arms wide
We crossed time and into your lap I melted
with the touch of your lips
I liquefied
Part of me slipped into a part of you
never to leave
A perfect match we were
meshed
we were in sync
The world was right
==================
The words I read hooked a memory
and pulled me back
into the comfort of you
and I wrap myself in the numb
one half time
will never be enough
again
================

oh girl...you got me with this one big time
what an awesome write
what a wonderful expression of undying love and self discovery thru anothers love.
when I read this .. I know...
you too onced loved a butterfly
thank you for this today...
i needed this reminder.
(hugs of understanding)
take care
jm

Strange ... the desire for certain pleasures is a part of my pain.
~Kahlil Gibran~

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2001-03-02 11:12 AM

lady...thank you...glad you enjoyed

mark...thank you, this is one of those 'acceptance' ones too...sometimes you just have to...and thanks for the advise and wishes for today.....after a rough week a day of sunshine and smiles is just what I need...oh and just wanted to say thanks for the comments on my format, at another board, some of the critiques on my writing were that i was forcing the reader to read as i wanted, not allowing them interpretation. I didn't see it that way, I always thought of it as you said it... I hope we are right

jm (hugs back) thanks lady and yeppers I know you do understand, its like reading my own memories when i read you...

[This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 03-02-2001).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2001-03-02 01:28 PM

Beautiful poem, dear friend... This one makes my heart ache for you deserve eons to savor with a love who makes time stand still. *S*

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2001-03-02 02:05 PM

Double wow.

Mike

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

7 posted 2001-03-02 02:51 PM

suthern...sigh...what can i say...me too...me too...thank you lady

mike, thank you...a wow from you is a compliment indeed

Packratmike
Senior Member

since 2001-02-25

Posts 632
California, USA

8 posted 2001-03-02 11:28 PM

The world was right
days slipped easy
oiled with smiles and laughter
until you had to leave
And now I try alone
some days you are my comfort
some nights you are my dream
when it hurts too much to go on
you are my Novocain

I like this.....great job Jellybeans??? I'm sure it feels good to get those feelings into your writing....I know it did for me. I'm glad my poem helped.

Packratmike

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