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Disgruntled Junior Member
since 2001-03-01
Posts 13 |
Whatever happened to those good old days, When I could glance into your eyes, And see MY reflection in them, When I could count on you for a hug everyday, And your laughter rang like a bird in song, When you would lean on me in utter confidence, Sending me into a euphoria, Into which nothing penetrated but your fresh spring scent, When I could depend on you to worry about my health, How you would ask if I was ok when I wouldn't talk, I revelled in your affection, Secretly praising you as my goddess, Now, Now I must struggle for a moments attention, Feeling as though I am nothing but a burden, While to my agony, You cast your bottomless eyes unto other men, And I silently watch from the corner of your existence, Satisfying myself with unstable reassurances that if I just hang on, Just a little while longer, You will once again, Search for that friend's embrace, And I will be there, Just like in the good old days. [This message has been edited by Disgruntled (edited 03-01-2001).] |
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Disgruntled Junior Member
since 2001-03-01
Posts 13 |
your kind replies and critiques are duly noted friends |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Welcome to Passions! This is an excellent write-- could unfortunately relate to it a little all too well. hope you like it here, it's a wonderful place to go! take care amy  "A friend is someone who knows the song in your heart & can sing it back to you when you have forgotten the words." |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, I have to say this is sad, but very good. I hope you don't mind, but you've inspired me; and if I get the courage, I might just post an answer poem of sorts. Welcome here! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Its so hard when the one you love looks into anothers eyes...wonderful write...and welcome to our world |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Oh, to have one to count on that way...and to be one to count on that way. Wonderfully miraculous things to accomplish. |
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DreamLess Member
since 2001-02-28
Posts 92 |
hey i really loved your words hope to see more from you |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You've written well of the ache and confusion of realizing you're no longer special to someone without a clue to the whys and wherefores... and the regrets of good times not lasting. Welcome to Passions! [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 03-02-2001).] |
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soozieque_28 Junior Member
since 2000-11-28
Posts 28Tennessee |
This reminds me of my life right now. Except I am the woman and it isn't other women he looks at, it just isn't me. i miss the way it used to be. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome!!! First this made tears come to my eyes, hot and fast.....I had a guy like you once upon a time.......I worshiped him.......he never returned it so I went away......if he'd have made one sound of wanting me, I'd have been his for life.....it wasn't to be.....and I still miss him, in a quiet corner of my heart.....whew, I rambled off there didn't I? what I mean to say is that this touched my heart, I love it! SEA |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Welcome. Very touching, excellently done. A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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ocean New Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 6 |
The Poem was very nice, but I would like to ask how did you get to post it? I have been trying to post for days and it says they have no room for anything new? Is this a private poetry room.. thank you, Ocean.. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ocean, Did you try hitting New Topic? try........ if not,then go to bug swatter SEA |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Welcome and you wrote a heart wrenching poem. I, too, know what it feels like, but on both sides. So believe it or not, there is still a chance. It will take lots of hard work and you have to ask yourself if that is what you really want! Hugs, ME |
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